Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The map illustrates the comparision between a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Overall, significantly change saw in park over the period. Aditionally, managed many part of park and developed more fasilities in today park.
Initialy, the park in 1920 have two entrance in east and waste side. There was two rose garden near by eastern and one rose garden western the park. In addition, fountain was located in the center of park and stage for musicians left side the fountain. In the park areas side figure showed five seats.
In contras, Grange park develop vast majority of the present day. There are a lot of facilities available in present day. In the center of park have a rose garden and four seats around the rose garden. The park have two entrans which is also in old park. Left side of park have amphitheatre for concerats and right side add water feature , cafe and children's play area. One rose garden northeastern in the garde.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of Grange Park in 1920 and today, noting changes such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden and the addition of an amphitheatre, a cafe, and a children's play area. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the spatial reporting and misreadings of the visual data. For example, the student states that the park in 1920 had entrances on the 'east and waste side' (whereas they are north and south), and mislocates various features. The overview is extremely brief and ungrammatical. Consequently, the development of ideas is limited and inaccurate in places, corresponding closely to Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into short paragraphs representing an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs for each time period. However, the overall organization suffers from a lack of clear progression and logical structuring. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate (e.g., 'Initialy', 'In contras'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow spatial relationships across the park maps. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences and paragraphs is faulty, placing the response firmly at Band 4.5 to 5.0. We award Band 5.0 as there is a recognizable structural framework.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is very basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained. The student relies on simple terms like 'park', 'rose garden', and 'seats', accompanied by numerous severe word-choice and spelling errors ('comparision', 'significantly change saw', 'fasilities', 'Initialy', 'entrans', 'concerats'). Attempts to use less common vocabulary fail due to inaccurate collocations and word forms (e.g., 'developed vast majority of the present day'). Spelling errors are frequent and occasionally cause strain for the reader, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text. The response contains a very limited range of structures, and almost every sentence features major grammatical errors, missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement failures (e.g., 'significantly change saw in park', 'the park in 1920 have two entrance', 'In the center of park have a rose garden'). Complex sentence attempts are faulty and non-standard. Because errors are pervasive and frequently impede meaning, the performance reflects Band 4.0 criteria.
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