Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Overall, grange has undergone significant changes.Some new facilities have been added and some basic orignal places have been replaced or changed.
Old grange park had two main entrance and consisted some common places such as rose garden had both side of the entrace, a seats area in left side and also a pond for water plants. It had a stage for musicians and a fountain in the middle of grange park. Also there was a glasshouse near to eldon street.
Today grange park have been consisted some new places. Fountain has been relaced with rose gargen. Pond has been converted into children play area. A amphitheatre has been constructed opposite to the rose garden. Glasshouse has been replaced with water feature. Also a car paking was installed in underground. A cafe was built near to the children play area.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to address the task by comparing Grange Park in 1920 with its layout today. An overview is provided at the beginning, noting that the park has undergone significant changes. Several main features are identified and contrasted, such as the fountain being replaced by a rose garden, the pond being converted into a children's play area, and the addition of a café and underground car park. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions in reporting specific locations and features; for instance, the amphitheatre is described as being constructed opposite the rose garden when it occupies the western area where the stage and a rose garden previously stood. Furthermore, the description lacks sufficient detail and integration to fully satisfy the requirements of a Band 7 response, making Band 5.5 a fair assessment due to under-developed comparisons and imprecise reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organised into four brief paragraphs, attempting a logical progression from introduction to body paragraphs detailing past and present features. However, paragraphing is inconsistent, particularly with the very short opening paragraph. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic, relying on simple connectors like 'Also' and repetitive sentence structures starting with subject-verb patterns. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'Today grange park have been consisted some new places'. Although the overall arrangement allows the reader to follow the general comparison, the mechanical nature of the cohesion and faulty referencing limit the response to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-form errors that detract from the quality of the writing. Examples include 'grange' instead of 'Grange', 'orignal' (original), 'entrace' (entrance), 'gargen' (garden), 'amphitheatre' (used with an incorrect article 'A amphitheatre'), and 'paking' (parking). While the student attempts topic-specific vocabulary related to maps and parks (e.g., 'rose garden', 'glasshouse', 'fountain', 'underground car park'), the high frequency of basic lexical and spelling errors means the vocabulary is only minimally adequate for the task, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student employs a limited range of sentence structures, mostly consisting of simple sentences and basic passive forms. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('grange park have been consisted'), missing articles ('a seats area', 'children play area'), and incorrect prepositions ('had both side'). Complex structures are attempted with varying degrees of success, but persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation cause frequent distractions for the reader, placing the grammar performance firmly at Band 5.0.
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