Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram of public park demonstrate the transformation of public park from opened in 1920 to the present day.
Overall , the Grange public park has undergone notable enhancement , including the expansion of stage for musicians into the amphitheatre for concert ,and the seats and rose garden arranged in centre whereas one seats and rose garden gas substract in presnt .The introduction of new amenities whille cetain features has remained unchanged.
The public park which is characterized by Grange park opened fiest in 1920 , there is lots of amenities available in this park has two entrance one in the northern part which is in the ARNOLD AVENUE side and other to the opposite direction in southern side which is connected to the ELDON STREET.Whereas in the middle of the the both entrance in the central part of the park fountain situated which occupy a quite space.The rose garden situated in the west northern side in the left side in the corner there is one seats available.Whereas in the opposite direction of rose garden there is also another rose garden and in the southern west side and in the lest side of corner it has also one seats and the reamining twp seats is besides the right side both both garden.And another rose garden situated in the western north and the seats in the eastern south.The stage for musician is located between the rose garden in the west side in the left side of fountain.Moreover , there is a pond for water plant available which is in the eastern south part in the corner of park And last feature the classhouse is in the right side of entrance which is nearby ELDON STREET.
According to the current layout , there is some transformation in the features from the past such as the rose garden which are 3 available before nowtrans formed into 2 and one is still in the same position in thw west northern part whereas another is in the middle part of park where fountain is available in past .The seats are also changed the position and substract one seat from beforelayout and all the four seats are arranged in the around of rose garden which is located in the central part of the parrk .The stage for musicians also converted into the amphitheatre for concert .In the right side of entrance where rose garden avaible it converted into cafe and the pond for water plants changed into children's area .The glasshouse also changes and transformed into water feature wheares the additional features the entrance underground car park installed later in present day.Although the lots of things has been changed some features remaine unchanged the gate of entrance and one rose garden.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main changes between the 1920 and present-day layouts of Grange Park. The writer correctly identifies several key transformations, such as the conversion of the stage into an amphitheatre, the replacement of the fountain with a central rose garden surrounded by seats, and the addition of a café, children's play area, and an underground car park. However, there are numerous inaccuracies and confused descriptions regarding locations and spatial relationships, particularly in the detailed body paragraphs (e.g., misinterpreting the positions of various rose gardens and seating arrangements). While an overview is provided, the lack of precision and awkward phrasing prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into distinct paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for the past and current layouts. However, progression is frequently hindered by clumsy transitions and repetitive mechanical cohesive devices. Referencing is often unclear, with pronouns and spatial markers like 'there is' and 'whereas' misused, creating confusion for the reader. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences is weak, leading to choppy and disjointed reading overall.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'park', 'rose garden', 'seats', and 'entrance'. There are numerous word formation and lexical errors throughout the text, such as 'substract' instead of 'subtract', 'classhouse' for 'glasshouse', and 'nowtrans formed'. Less common lexical items are attempted, but they are generally inaccurate or inappropriately collocated. These persistent lexical errors and spelling mistakes noticeably impede smooth communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, heavily relying on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. Grammatical errors are pervasive throughout the text, including missing articles (e.g., 'demonstrate transformation of public park'), subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'features has remained'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward prepositional phrases. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and obscure the precise meaning of many sentences.
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