Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

in 1920 the middle of the grange park have a fountain but now today in the mid of the grange park makes a rose garden and make sitting area all sides of the rose garden. there has two entrance gate one is connected with Arnold street and second is connected with ELDON STREET in 1920 but now they have also two entrance gate but also makes the underground car parking and its entrance is right side corner of this park which connected the street Eldon. in 1920 this park have two small rose garden with sitting area on both sides of this garden one rose garden is connected with Arnold street and second rose garden is connected with Eldon street. in the middle of these two gardens has a stage of musicians this park have one more small rose park which connected with Arnold avenue street at the right end of this rose park have a ponds for water plants at the other side which connected the Eldon street have a glass house with sitting area in the right side of this glass house.

now , today at the right side of park which connected with Arnold street makes a cafe instead of small rose park and at the right end of this cafe have a children play area and at the other side of this park makes a water feature with underground car parking. at the left side of this park have a Amphitheatre for concerts instead of stage of musicians and also have a small rose garden at the side of Arnold avenue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by comparing the features of Grange Park between 1920 and today, correctly noting major changes such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden, the addition of a café, and the inclusion of an underground car park. However, the response lacks a clear overall overview, which is a key requirement for Academic Task 1. Furthermore, the description contains several inaccuracies and omissions regarding the exact locations of certain features, and the progression of ideas is hindered by a lack of structured paragraphs. While the main changes are acknowledged, the overall execution falls short of the higher band descriptors due to the missing overview and underdeveloped summarisation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response shows very limited control over coherence and cohesion. The text is divided into only two dense paragraphs with poor structural progression. There is a complete lack of standard cohesive devices or linking phrases to guide the reader through the spatial comparisons, relying instead on repetitive and basic connectors like 'in 1920' and 'now today'. Paragraphing is inappropriate, as the entire visual comparison is crammed into massive blocks of text without logical partitioning between past and present features or different areas of the park. Referencing is also confusing, making it difficult to follow which part of the map is being described.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple verbs and nouns such as 'make', 'have', 'park', and 'rose garden'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or paraphrasing, leading to direct repetitions like 'rose park' and 'entrance gate'. Word choice is frequently inaccurate, such as using 'makes' instead of 'was located' or 'is built'. Spelling errors and awkward collocations, such as 'right side corner' and 'sitting area on both sides', are noticeable and occasionally cause strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with frequent and persistent errors throughout the response. The text suffers from major tense confusion, incorrectly using present tense verbs ('have', 'makes', 'is connected') to describe historical features from 1920, and mixing them inconsistently with past tense forms. There is an almost complete absence of correct punctuation, with run-on sentences lacking capital letters and full stops. Complex sentence structures are rarely attempted, and when they are, they contain severe structural flaws and agreement errors, such as 'in the middle of these two gardens has a stage'.

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