Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The maps show transformation of Grange park from 1920 to present. The map shows structural modifications of the park during these years.
The park has been modernized according to the trends throughout the span of this time. A play area for the kids has been set up on the left side of the entrance from Arnold Avenue. The fountain was taken over by a rose garden having seats aound it. The stage for the musicians has been removed by an Amphitheatre for concerts and shows.
The Amphiteatre has proper seating facility which can accomodate a huge crowd. For this purpose the rose garden from bottom left side of the park has been shifted to the center with seating facility around it. In order to make room for the rose garden the fountain has been demolished.
The glass house has bee demolished to accomodate a water feature along with plants to make it look more charming. A children's play area has also been built for the kids where they can play. A cafe has also been built on the left side of entrance from Arnold Avenue where people can enjoy coffee or tea in a beatiful and natural enviroment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully identifies the main changes between 1920 and the present day at Grange Park, mentioning features such as the amphitheatre, the cafe, the play area, and the water feature. However, there is no overall summary or clear overview statement provided at the beginning or end of the response, which is a key requirement for Task 1. Additionally, some spatial descriptions are slightly inaccurate or repetitive (for example, mentioning the children's play area twice). To reach a higher band, the student should include a clear introductory overview highlighting the main global changes, such as the general modernization and the replacement of passive features with entertainment facilities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has a basic organization, moving through various changes in the park. However, paragraphing is poorly handled, with several short, disconnected paragraphs that lack cohesive progression. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas smoothly, and some repetition occurs (such as mentioning the children's play area in separate sections). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the text would benefit from a more logical grouping of spatial features—for instance, discussing the northern modifications together rather than jumping back and forth. Overall cohesion is mechanical and basic.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for describing basic physical changes, featuring terms like 'modernized,' 'demolished,' 'amphitheatre,' and 'transformation.' However, there are several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'aound' instead of 'around', 'Amphiteatre', 'accomodate' (accommodate), and 'bee' instead of 'been'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, with frequent use of basic verbs like 'built' and 'has been'. To improve, the student needs to incorporate a wider range of less common lexical items and precise synonyms for spatial changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response includes a mix of simple and some complex structures, such as passive voice constructions ('has been modernized,' 'has been demolished'). However, there are noticeable grammatical and mechanical errors throughout the text, including spelling slips ('aound', 'bee', 'accomodate') and punctuation issues. Some sentence structures are awkward, such as 'The stage for musicians has been removed by an Amphitheatre,' where the preposition is misused. While meaning is generally clear despite these errors, the frequency of slips prevents the response from achieving a higher band score.
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