Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pictures illustrate the public park who firstly inaugurated in 1920 and the similar park nowaday.

Overall, it is clear that many changings done in park during this era. Like the sitting arrangements, place for public events, and replacing fountain with water feature. In addition, we clearly see the transformation of pond for water plants to the children's play area.

Looking first at the rose garden, the 1920 map shows that there are three rose garden in the park, which can be reduced into two, one on the same place as it is and the second one on the center of park w

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is severely under-length, containing only 104 words compared to the required 150-word minimum. Because of this, the task is only partially addressed, and the description of the changes between 1920 and today remains incomplete, cutting off abruptly in the second body paragraph ('...on the center of park w'). While the student does attempt an overview and highlights some key features such as seating arrangements, the fountain, and the pond, the lack of completion and sufficient detail significantly limits the development required for higher bands, placing this criterion at Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay attempts a basic structure with an introduction and a brief overview paragraph, but the organization is severely hindered by the incomplete nature of the response, which breaks off mid-sentence. Cohesive devices are minimal and rudimentary, such as 'Overall' and 'Looking first at', and referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'the similar park nowaday'). Paragraphing is also disrupted by the abrupt ending of the text. Overall cohesion and progression cannot be fully evaluated due to the short and unfinished writing, resulting in a Band 4.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring noticeable word-choice and form errors such as 'who firstly inaugurated' instead of 'which was first inaugurated' and 'nowaday' instead of 'today' or 'present day'. Other phrasing like 'many changings done in park' demonstrates a limited lexical range with frequent inaccuracies. Although the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts about the park maps, the frequent errors and lack of sophisticated phrasing restrict the score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is quite limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex structures that contain frequent errors. Examples include 'public park who firstly inaugurated', 'many changings done in park during this era', and the incomplete sentence structure at the end of the text. Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent. These persistent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher score, aligning with Band 5.0.

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