Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

There is a park called Grange park establashied in 1920 which seem quite old fashion park according to me .Wht i see in the park is there is beautiful funtain located centre of garden and lots of seat available to seet allover he corner, there are two entrance to entre to the park . some facility like garden for roses and pond also located at the corner where some fishes are seen in the diagram . furthermore there is a one stage for musician to play the instrument oviously thats to entertainment to the crowd its lokk nice to see how nicely they organized the park happy to see the park belonging the ancinet design . one thing that attract mine mind is that the glasshouse located at the park which seems to much pretty for me. overall tha park is perfect to visit.on the other side tha park seem renovated currently is much better design tham the past. something are added to the park ,like under ground parking seems available ,amphitheatre concert is added for the entertainment also the setting side are well managed . Its seem like much space is available to roaming around the park

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The student attempts to describe the changes to Grange Park between 1920 and today, mentioning several features such as the fountain, rose gardens, the stage, the glasshouse, and newer additions like the amphitheatre, café, and underground parking. However, the response falls short of standard Academic Task 1 requirements. It lacks a clear, formal overview, and the style is entirely conversational and subjective (e.g., 'which seem quite old fashion park according to me', 'happy to see the park belonging the ancinet design'). Furthermore, some details mentioned, such as 'fishes' in the pond, are not present in the visual data. The summary is disorganised and relies heavily on personal commentary rather than objective reporting of main features and comparisons, placing it at Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from significant structural and cohesive deficiencies. It is written as one long block of text with virtually no paragraphing to separate the past layout from the present changes. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying on rudimentary links like 'furthermore' and 'on the other side'. The flow is disrupted by run-on sentences and a lack of clear progression, making the comparison between the two maps difficult to follow. Pronoun referencing is also unclear in places, such as 'that attract mine mind', leading to a disjointed and poorly organised response that aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical range is very limited and basic, marked by persistent spelling errors and inappropriate word choices for an academic task. Examples of errors include 'establashied', 'old fashion', 'funtain', 'entre', 'ancinet', 'lokk', and 'under ground'. Informal and conversational vocabulary ('happy to see', 'much pretty for me') is used instead of precise, objective terminology suitable for describing maps and plans (e.g., 'transformed', 'replaced', 'relocated'). Due to the frequency of spelling mistakes and the lack of a sufficient academic vocabulary range, the response meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by frequent basic errors, run-on sentences, and comma splices (e.g., 'There is a park called Grange park establashied in 1920 which seem quite old fashion park according to me .Wht i see in the park is there is...'). There is a lack of control over tense consistency when describing historical versus current features. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost invariably faulty, and punctuation is largely neglected. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect Band 4.0 grammar descriptors.

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