Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given figures demonstrates the transformation of the Arnold revenue from 1920 to 2026.overall, the appearance of the public park has transormed alots . Many of the changes occur in a particular existing area of the revenue.

In the beginning , stage for musicians is replaced by Amphitheatre for concerts . Rose Garden and seats located at aside are relocates to the middle of the revenue with rose garden at centre surrounded by seats by all sides.

Insipte of this all changes, fountain which was existed at centre is relocated to enterance Underground car park area. at the same time , glasshouse is removed from the area and opposite to that new cafe is opened. And ponds for water plants is replaced by children's play area. However, the revenue has modified alots. But the without any modification entrance gates remain unchanged and are not relocated.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe the changes to Grange Park between 1920 and the present day, but it contains several inaccuracies regarding the locations and nature of the features. For instance, the student refers to the location as 'Arnold revenue' instead of Grange Park, and misinterprets the map by stating that the fountain is relocated to the underground car park entrance. Furthermore, the length requirement of 150 words is not met, as the text contains only 145 words, which incurs a penalty under Task Achievement. While an overview is attempted, the limited development, inaccurate data reporting, and failure to meet the minimum word count restrict this section to a band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organization lacks logical progression and clarity. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, as seen in phrases like 'Insipte of this all changes' and 'And ponds for water plants'. The referencing of locations (such as 'aside', 'middle of the revenue') is frequently unclear and confusing for the reader. Paragraphing is attempted, but the weak logical links between sentences and the absence of a smooth flow throughout prevent the response from achieving a higher band. Cohesion is faulty and mechanical, placing this performance at a band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and contains repeated errors in word choice and terminology. The student repeatedly misuses the word 'revenue' instead of park or area. Other lexical inaccuracies include 'transormed alots', 'enterance', and spelling mistakes like 'Insipte'. While there is an attempt to use vocabulary related to maps and changes (such as 'replaced', 'relocated', 'removed'), the range is very limited and noticeable errors occur frequently, occasionally causing confusion for the reader. This corresponds to a band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The text shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently marred by errors. Examples of grammatical inaccuracies include 'The given figures demonstrates', 'stage for musicians is replaced' (missing articles), and 'fountain which was existed'. Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic, particularly at the beginning of sentences and after full stops (e.g., 'revenue.overall', 'centre. at the same time'). The high frequency of errors across basic and complex sentence forms places this criterion firmly at a band 4.5.

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