Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The map shows that a public park was first opened in 1920 and a similar park exists nowadays. In the overview, the fountain was changed into a rose garden with a lot of seats of their surrounding.
The grand park in 1920. There is a fountain in the middle of Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. On the right side, there is a stage for musicians and a rose garden on the corner. The pond is for water plants on the left corner and has seats. A glass house is on the left of the Eldon Street entrance. A modern Grange park; the fountain can be converted into a rose garden and have seats on all of the four sides. The water pond can be changed into the children's play area, and on the right side, a new cafe can be constructed. The right corner rose garden can remain unchanged, and the stage area can be converted into an amphitheatre for concerts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the changes to Grange Park between 1920 and today, noting key features such as the fountain, rose gardens, stage, and new additions like the amphitheatre and cafe. However, the task achievement is limited by significant weaknesses in selection and reporting. The overview is placed awkwardly within the introduction and mentions only a single feature rather than summarizing the main overall trends. Furthermore, the phrasing is often confused, such as stating 'the fountain can be converted into a rose garden' rather than describing static historical changes. Some locations are also misdescribed or misoriented (e.g., confusing left and right). Overall, the response addresses the prompt only partially and lacks a clear, comprehensive overview of the maps.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay lacks clear logical organization and progression. The text is broken into only two very short paragraphs, with the first functioning as a poorly integrated introduction and overview, and the second functioning as a block of continuous description. Paragraphing is inadequate for an Academic Task 1 response, as there is no separation between the description of the 1920 map and the modern map. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate or mechanical, such as 'A modern Grange park; the fountain can be converted into...'. Referencing and directional markers (like 'right side' and 'left corner') are imprecise, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships clearly.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying heavily on literal terms from the prompt and simple nouns like 'fountain', 'rose garden', and 'seats'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'seats of their surrounding', 'grand park', and 'water pond'. Furthermore, the student uses inappropriate modal verbs for a static map comparison, repeatedly employing terms like 'can be converted' and 'can be constructed' instead of describing actual historical changes or current layouts. The lexical range is adequate for basic communication but falls short of the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences and flawed attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues that disrupt the flow of reading, such as sentence fragments ('The grand park in 1920.') and missing verbs or prepositions. Tense usage is confused; the student shifts awkwardly between present descriptions and future or modal possibilities (e.g., 'the fountain can be converted into... and have seats'). These errors frequently cause strain for the reader and prevent the formation of a majority of error-free sentences.
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