Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The chart illustrates the plans of public park when it first opened in 1920. and the same park today.
Overall, the most striking trend opening a new cafe shop grange park today. Although, new children’s play area opening in grange park today.
Regarding grange park in 1920 and todays, before we there 3 rose garden in 3 multiple areas in grange park now in today’s grange park we see only one rose garden one in middle of park. Secondly, i notice there no any cafe shop in old park in 1920, now the will open a new cafe area after the referable. And also before the divide seats area in different areas in 1920, now the combine all seats are in middle of surrounded of rose garden. Furthermore, they remove glasshouse in 1920 park theme now open new their water feature. Moreover, they will open new entrance underground park and also new Amphitheatre for concerts.
In conclusion, in today new park them they will open many new areas in this epically for children's play area and cafe for entertains.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to compare the two maps of Grange Park in 1920 and today, noting several key changes such as the addition of a café, children's play area, and an amphitheatre, as well as the removal of the glasshouse. However, the overview is extremely fragmented and ungrammatical ('the most striking trend opening a new cafe shop grange park today'), failing to provide a clear summary of the overall progression. Furthermore, some details are confused or awkwardly described, such as the seating arrangements. While the student identifies several main features, the lack of a cohesive overview and the limited development place this performance firmly at Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the text is severely hindered by poor sentence structure and lack of standard cohesive devices. Although the response is broken into paragraphs, the internal progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. Phrases like 'Regarding grange park in 1920 and todays, before we there 3 rose garden' demonstrate a failure to structure logical sentences or sequence ideas smoothly. Referencing and substitution are frequently faulty, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial comparisons between the past and present layouts. Cohesion is inadequate and mechanical throughout, consistent with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on direct lifting or faulty memory of the prompt terms ('cafe shop', 'rose garden', 'glasshouse'). There are severe issues with word choice, word formation, and collocation, such as 'referable' instead of refurbishment or development, 'epically' instead of especially, and 'entertains' instead of entertainment. Many lexical items are misused or non-existent in this context, causing significant strain for the reader and restricting the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text. The response contains almost no error-free sentences, and basic structures are frequently mangled with missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and tense confusion (e.g., 'before we there 3 rose garden', 'now the will open a new cafe area', 'they remove glasshouse in 1920 park theme now open new their water feature'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are misused, leading to fragmented thoughts. This represents a very limited range of structures with frequent errors that constantly distort meaning, aligning with Band 4.0.
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