Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plans illustrate show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today there is many differance occur,

Grange park in 1920 has many things ,this park start with entrance on ARNOLD AVENUE where visitors enter into the park .

Rose garden on the left side of the park corner ,in this rose garden different types of flower .

Pond for water plants also located on the right corner of the park .Moreever ,seats also aviliable for visitor sitting on boath sides of park.

Furthermore, stage for musicians avilable for performing different program ,one fountain located in the center for the beautification of park .

overall,the second entrance on the ELDON STREET and one glasshouse also present in the park .

Now day the different changes occur in the GRANCE PARK today adding new children play area for playing different sports .Rose garden come in the center of park now and seats aviliable now around the garden .

Amphitheatre for concerts of different programs .Water feature adding new one the park and the second entrance now underground other features same .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to compare Grange Park in 1920 with the present day, noting several key changes such as the addition of the amphitheatre, children's play area, and the changes to the central rose garden and fountain. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and impressionistic manner rather than a structured summary. Several details are vague or inaccurate, such as stating that a water feature was a new addition when it replaced the glasshouse, and failing to provide a clear overall overview of the primary transformations. The reporting lacks clear data selection, resulting in an under-developed response that touches on the task requirements only partially, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text lacks clear overall progression and suffers from poor paragraphing and sentence structure. Sentences are often disjointed fragments, and cohesive devices are either misused or absent, as seen in awkward transitions like 'Moreever ,seats also aviliable for visitor sitting on boath sides of park.' The organisational structure is weak, jumping back and forth between features without a logical flow comparing the past and present clearly. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow the spatial relationships on the map. This level of organisation aligns with Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'differance', 'aviliable', 'boath', 'avilable', 'overall,the', and 'Now day'. The student relies heavily on simple, direct vocabulary from the prompt without demonstrating the ability to paraphrase effectively. While the basic names of features like 'rose garden', 'fountain', and 'amphitheatre' are used, the severe and frequent lexical and spelling inaccuracies strain the reader and restrict the score to a Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of poorly constructed simple sentences and sentence fragments rather than complete clauses. There is a persistent lack of verbs (e.g., 'Grange park in 1920 has many things ,this park start with entrance...', 'Amphitheatre for concerts of different programs'). Errors in tense, articles, prepositions, and agreement are constant and frequently impede communication. Complex sentence structures are absent. These persistent grammatical breakdowns firmly place the response in Band 4.0.

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