Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The plans underneath exhibit a popular park when it first opened in 1920 and the copy of park now a days.
In the summary, the grange park is nineteen century or now a days between different. In nineteen century the grange park is very simple but they have change the center of fountain is convert the rose garden in now adays . And the right side the stage for musicians is change in now a days are amphitheatre for concerts.and the left side of grass house is converted in water feature in now adays.
In the explanantion, The grange park is the center of the foundation in 1920 but they change the rose garden in now a days. And the rose garden is around the seats. The right side of stage for musicians in 1920 but they have change the amphitheatre for concerts in today. The left side of corner is grass house but they change in water feature today. And the left top corner is pond for water plantsbut they change in children play area for now a days. So , many rose garden is located in 1920 but they have change in now a days are one rose garden is same in 1920 but 2 rose garden are finished. And the many seats are located in 1920 for every corner but they have change for arounded the rose garden.So, I think garnage park have same entrance in 1920 or today but they have 2 entrance is located opposite sides.And one entrance is aronld avenue and second entrance is eldon street.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes shown in the two maps of Grange Park from 1920 to the present day. However, it fails to provide a clear or accurate overview of the main trends. Many details are misidentified or poorly described, such as confusing the glasshouse on the southern edge with a 'grass house' on the left side, and mislocating features like the pond and the stage. The descriptions are repetitive and lack precision. Although some features are mentioned, the lack of a structured summary and frequent inaccuracies limit the development of the task. Therefore, this falls under Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, starting with an introductory sentence followed by two body paragraphs labeled as 'summary' and 'explanantion'. However, the logical progression is weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying heavily on repetitive phrasing like 'they have change' and 'in now a days'. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between features on the maps. Overall organisation is strained, resulting in a Band 4.0 score.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies on elementary words and phrases such as 'popular park', 'simple', and 'change'. There are notable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'grass house' instead of 'glasshouse', 'foundation' instead of 'fountain', and the awkward temporal phrase 'in now a days'. The range of vocabulary is inadequate for a task requiring descriptive precision, reflecting a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The submission displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex forms that are grammatically faulty, such as 'In the summary, the grange park is nineteen century or now a days between different.' Errors in tense, preposition use, and subject-verb agreement are frequent throughout the text, including 'they have change' and 'two entrance is located'. These persistent errors frequently strain the reader's understanding, earning a Band 4.0.
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