Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagrams compare the public park from its initiation in 1920 to now a days.
In biggning, Grang Park had fountain in center of park and a stage for musicians in its left side by contrasting to now, central area is covered by rose garden and seats are arranged around it while water feature is on right corner after entrance.The Amphitheatre for concert is opposite to the rose garden.
In 1920, there were three rose gardens in Grange Park and a pond for planting water in the corner, however seats are arranged on each side of the garden. Additionally, there were a glasshouse in left corner from elder street entrance. Now, rose garden is establishd in center of park while children play area in place of water pond while Amphiteatre for
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, finishing prematurely at 131 words with an incomplete final sentence. Despite this length penalty, the student attempts to summarise the main features of Grange Park in 1920 and today, noting significant changes such as the replacement of the central fountain with a rose garden and the addition of an amphitheatre and café. However, the description is somewhat fragmented due to the abrupt ending, and certain details lack precision, such as mixing up the positions of specific features. To achieve a higher band score, the writer must ensure the task is fully completed with a robust overview and sufficient word count.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays a basic logical structure, attempting to contrast the past and present layouts using sequencing phrases like 'In biggning' and 'now a days'. However, paragraphing is underdeveloped and the text breaks off mid-sentence, preventing a cohesive conclusion. Reference words and cohesive devices are used rather mechanically, and the overall progression is disrupted by sentence fragments and spelling errors. For better cohesion, the student should organize ideas into distinct paragraphs comparing specific zones of the park and ensure smooth transitions between sentences.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'biggning' for beginning, 'Grang Park' for Grange Park, and 'establishd' for established. While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to park features (e.g., 'fountain', 'rose garden', 'amphitheatre', 'glasshouse'), the overall lexical range is limited and frequently imprecise. To improve, the student should expand their range of descriptive vocabulary and check spelling carefully before finalizing the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The essay features a mix of simple and attempting complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is quite low. There are frequent errors in preposition usage ('in center of park', 'on right corner'), missing articles ('were a glasshouse'), and incorrect verb forms ('rose garden is establishd'). Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly with a dangling conjunction ('while Amphiteatre for'). These persistent errors and structural failures noticeably impede communication and pull the score down into the lower band.
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