Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The entrance in the park is same from EDEN STREET. In 1920 when we enter in the garden there was a fountain which was placed and now there is rose garden at this place. Along with rose garden there are many seats around the all sides of the garden.
On the left hand side there was stage for musical concert. Went into Amphitheatre for concert. The seats which are present at the different places in the park now shifted around the Rose garden. In 1920 there are three rose garden at different area now in the middle and right side of the Arnold AVENUE entrance.
In 1920 from another avenue entrance the left side of the garden the rose garden which are at that place is vanished and now cafe is made at that place. Pond for water plants also situated and nearby children playing area was established. The Glass house also completed further and water feature added at that place. When you move along with [unclear word] rightward there is the entrance of underground car parking which was not in 1920.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the changes to Grange Park between 1920 and today, noting several key alterations such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden and the addition of a cafe, children's play area, and underground car park. However, the response falls short in several areas. The overall summary (overview) is weak and fails to highlight the most striking global changes, such as the general shift from quiet relaxation areas to more recreational facilities. Furthermore, there are several misreadings or inaccurate descriptions of spatial relationships; for instance, the text mentions 'EDEN STREET' instead of 'ELDON STREET' and contains confusing descriptions like 'Went into Amphitheatre for concert.' Due to these under-developed ideas and inaccuracies in reporting the visual data, the response aligns best with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows some organizational structure by breaking the description into paragraphs comparing different parts of the park, but overall progression is lacking. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as the abrupt transitions between sentences ('Went into Amphitheatre for concert') and vague referencing ('at that place', 'from another avenue entrance'). Paragraphing is attempted, but ideas within paragraphs are disjointed rather than logically sequenced, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial layout smoothly. There is a heavy reliance on repetitive spatial markers without adequate cohesive ties. This performance fits the Band 5 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'rose garden', 'seats', 'entrance', and 'place'. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as 'vanished' used inappropriately for features being replaced, and an inaccurate street name ('EDEN STREET' instead of 'ELDON STREET'). Attempts at less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or awkward, such as 'Glass house also completed further'. While the meaning is occasionally communicated, the limited range and frequent word-choice errors cause some difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('when we enter in the garden there was a fountain which was placed'), missing articles ('there was stage for musical concert'), and incorrect prepositions ('around the all sides'). These errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader, though basic meaning is usually retrievable. This profile corresponds to a Band 5 for grammatical range and accuracy.
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