Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The maps illustrate the changes that took palce in public park between 1920 and present.
overall, the area underwent several changes, with new facilities being added and some exisiting features being removed. the area also become rose garden, whlie eldon street remained in the same position.
In year 1920 rose garden located in the north side, while stage for musicians was situated in the beside of fountain. fountain was positioned in the center with stage for musician next to it. in addition seates are placed corners. glasshouse placed at south left it located.
in present fountain had been replaced by rose garden, while stage for musicians had be removed fruthermore amphitheatre for concerts was constructed in the left side of garden and one cafe is added in the garden. one more thing that relocated meanwhile water feature that can entrance underground car park rose garden in original position. seats are chaned the position in the graden.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the changes shown in the maps of Grange Park between 1920 and today. However, the response falls short in several areas. While some key features are mentioned, such as the addition of the cafe, amphitheatre, and children's play area, the overview is extremely vague and contains inaccurate statements, such as 'the area also become rose garden'. Furthermore, details regarding spatial locations are frequently confused or poorly articulated (e.g., placing the glasshouse at 'south left'). The reporting of visual data lacks precision and clarity, leading to an underdeveloped response that only partially satisfies the task requirements. This corresponds to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. The introduction and overview lack cohesive structure and contain major punctuation and capitalization issues. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in a disjointed flow where ideas feel randomly strung together (e.g., 'one more thing that relocated meanwhile water feature that can entrance underground car park rose garden in original position'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences and between clauses is frequently faulty. This aligns with Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for overall readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'changes', 'area', 'garden', and 'fountain'. There are numerous spelling errors ('palce', 'exisiting', 'whlie', 'seates', 'fruthermore') and severe word choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'stage for musician next to it', 'water feature that can entrance underground car park'). The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the maps, but the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing impedes smooth communication, placing this performance at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of structures, and most complex sentences are either missing or severely flawed. Basic errors are pervasive, including missing articles ('in year 1920 rose garden located'), incorrect verb forms ('fountain had been replaced', 'stage for musicians had be removed'), and missing subjects or verbs. Punctuation and capitalization are largely ignored throughout the text. Because errors occur in almost every sentence and frequently cause difficulty for the reader, the response meets the descriptors for Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.