Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The plan below show a public park when it was first open in 1920. The name of the park is grange park.there are two ways of entrance one from arnold avenue which is in north and the second entrance is from south which is eldon street.When we enter in the park there is a fountain in the middle of the park besides it there is stage of musicians.if we look to the west there are seats .In the west north there is rose garden bside the rose garden there are seats.In the east north there is pond for water plants .In the east there also seats.In the south east there is a glass house . In the west south there is a rose garden.

Now if we look the grange park today. there are two entrance In north entrance there is a cafe nere the cafe there is childrens play area.There is a water feature in the south east . If we look to the west there is a large amphitheatre for concerts. In the north west there is a rose garde.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to describe the two maps of Grange Park, noting several features from both 1920 and today, such as the entrances, fountain, stage, and rose gardens. However, the response fails to meet the core requirements of an Academic Task 1 summary. Specifically, there is no overall comparison or overview provided, which is essential to achieve a higher band score. Furthermore, the descriptions are fragmented and miss significant changes, such as the addition of the amphitheatre, underground car park entrance, and café in a structured, analytical manner. The information is presented more as a random list of locations rather than a coherent summary and comparison of visual data. This places the response in the lower bands for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from significant organizational issues. There is a complete lack of proper paragraphing, with the entire text clumped into two poorly structured blocks or running sentences. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, heavily relying on phrases like 'In the west', 'In the east', and 'if we look to'. Progression is difficult to follow because the spatial descriptions jump around without a logical flow or clear spatial reference points. Referencing is also weak, making it hard for the reader to track which park features are being compared across the two time periods. Overall, the logical structure needs substantial improvement.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('there is', 'rose garden', 'seats', 'entrance'). There are numerous spelling and capitalization errors throughout the text, such as 'grange park', 'bside', 'nere', and 'childrens'. The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to maps and parks (e.g., 'fountain', 'glass house', 'amphitheatre'), but the range is severely limited, and lexical control is weak. Words are often misused or awkwardly phrased due to a lack of flexible vocabulary, restricting the score in this category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterized by numerous basic sentence structure errors, run-on sentences, and punctuation failures (e.g., lowercase beginnings of sentences, missing full stops, and comma splices like 'today. there are'). There are also frequent omission errors, such as missing articles ('show a public park', 'in north') and prepositions. Complex sentence structures are virtually absent; the writing consists almost entirely of simple, repetitive clauses strung together. Errors frequently impede readability and reflect a limited command of English grammar.

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