Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The map will be illustrates public park started in 1920 and now which have things to include in there park.
BODY 1:
When public park start in 1920 then park have many things,like entertainments everythings in park.Children and youngs men and women also enjoy park and memory makes.Enter the park then important to see making beautiful park have fountain and left side have stage for musicians you enjoy and also more beautiful making park like rose garden have in there park.
BODY 2:
So now time park have make more things.Olds some things had been removed from the park.Entance looking now rose garden front an added more children park cafe and amphitheartre for concerts its makes very beautiful and north and east side have water feature.
OVERALL:
Now we compared overall changed park theme.If old people seeing he don't understands this park is GRANGE park.everythings is changed depends on time so he put like today benefits and makings park beautiful.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes to Grange Park between 1920 and today, noting the addition of amenities like a café, amphitheatre, and children's play area, and the removal of the fountain. However, the report fails to meet the core requirements of an Academic Task 1 response. It lacks a clear overall summary or overview, and instead of adopting an objective, formal academic tone, it includes inappropriate conversational commentary and personal reflections, such as 'If old people seeing he don't understands this park'. Furthermore, many spatial descriptions are vague or inaccurate, and key features such as the underground car park entrance are omitted. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into labelled sections ('BODY 1', 'BODY 2', 'OVERALL'), which indicates an awareness of structure, but the actual logical progression and flow are severely disrupted by non-standard formatting and broken sentences. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in disjointed phrasing such as 'So now time park have make more things.' Paragraphing does not function effectively to guide the reader through a structured comparison of visual data. References between sentences are frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which features are being contrasted. This level of organisation aligns with a Band 4.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student relies on rudimentary terms ('things', 'park', 'make', 'beautiful') and struggles with word formation and collocation, writing expressions like 'children park', 'amphitheartre', and 'Olds some things'. There is no evidence of less common lexical items or appropriate academic phrasing required for describing map transformations. Word choice errors and non-standard forms cause significant strain for the reader throughout the response. These limitations place the lexical performance firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structures employed are predominantly simple and inaccurate. The response contains pervasive errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and sentence construction, such as 'The map will be illustrates public park started in 1920' and 'Enter the park then important to see making beautiful park have fountain'. Complex structures are attempted unsuccessfully, leading to heavy ungrammaticality where meaning is frequently obscured or distorted. There are virtually no error-free sentences in the text. This performance reflects the descriptors for Band 4.0.
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