Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given picture giving information and we selcting and reporting the major characteristics and make compaisons of both .
Overall, the park has tranformed from a traditinal public space with music and excellent displays into a modern recreational area featuring an amphitheater ,cafe and children play area .
The given picture illustarte the information of a grange park how this park looked on 1920 and contrast it with its current appearance today .In 1920 , the park featured three rose garden one in each top corner and one rose garden remains in central area while the other two have been replaced by empty space and the other replaced by cafe . There were five seating areas but in the current layout this is removed .So there was a fountain in front of both entrance but today there is rose garden surrounded by seats . In 1920 , the park had a stage of musicians but it been replaced by amphitheature of concerts and also there was glasshouse which is displaced by wtaer featureand there is addition of underground car park .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of Grange Park in 1920 and today, noting key changes such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden, the addition of a café, and the conversion of the stage into an amphitheatre. However, there are notable inaccuracies and omissions in reporting the visual data; for instance, the student states that the seating areas were removed, whereas the maps clearly show seats surrounding the central rose garden and other parts of the park. Additionally, the overview is extremely brief and lifts phrasing directly from the prompt. Because some information is inaccurate and certain spatial relationships are misread, the task achievement is limited to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into a brief introductory sentence, an overview paragraph, and a body paragraph. However, paragraphing is somewhat irregular and ideas lack a clear, logical progression. Cohesive devices are minimal and often misused, leading to a choppy and repetitive flow. For example, sentences are frequently strung together with coordinating conjunctions like 'and' rather than appropriate logical connectors. Pronoun referencing is also unclear in places, such as 'which is displaced by wtaer featureand there is addition of underground car park'. The overall organization meets the criteria for Band 5.0, as there is some structure, but overall progression is hindered by faulty cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms such as 'park', 'rose garden', 'cafe', and 'fountain'. There are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'tranformed', 'traditinal', 'illustarte', 'amphitheature', 'wtaer', and 'featureand'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'recreational area' and 'appearance', but control is weak and collocation errors occur. The range is minimally adequate for the task, but errors in word choice and spelling impede communication at times, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay displays a limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures often result in heavy grammatical errors, missing articles, and incorrect tense usage, such as 'The given picture giving information and we selcting' and 'In 1920, the park featured three rose garden one in each top corner'. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces frequently misplaced before commas and periods. Errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, which aligns closely with the Band 5.0 descriptor for grammatical range and accuracy.
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