Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Diagram illustrates the developmental changes happened in public park which was opened in 1920. Looking from an overall perspective, it is apparent there are so many renovation done in public park such as stage for musicians is replaced with amphitheatre for concerts and fountain is replaced by rose garden surrounded by seats.
On the one hand, the public park which was opened in 1920 was very simple as there were two entrance from both sides. After enter from Arnold avenue or Eldon streets it lead to fountain which was in the centre and on the right side of fountain there was a stage for musicians. Moreover there were seats next to entrance on the right side of both side and rose garden were on the top and bottom side of stage and other seats was placed beside the rose gardens. The ponds for water plants was on top left corner and glasshouse was on leftside of Eldon street entrance.
After the renovation, the fountain replaced with rose garden surrounded by seats and stage for musicians changed into amphitheatre for concert. Furthermore, water feature is place on the left side of Eldon streets entrance and area for pond was converted into children play are and next to this cafe constructed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by comparing Grange Park in 1920 with its layout today. An overview is provided at the beginning, noting general renovations like the replacement of the stage and fountain. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and spatial misreadings regarding the map data. For example, the student states that the glasshouse was on the 'left side of Eldon street entrance', whereas it was on the eastern side, and misidentifies the locations of the water feature and cafe. Furthermore, the description is somewhat disjointed and fails to comprehensively cover all major structural transformations clearly, leading to an under-developed overview of the overall changes. This performance aligns best with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into three paragraphs, providing a basic structural arrangement. However, logical progression is hindered by poor paragraphing and weak transitional links. The student uses basic cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'Moreover', but these are often mechanically applied or used incorrectly to contrast spatial features rather than arguments. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as ambiguous pronoun use ('it lead to fountain'). The overall organization lacks a smooth flow, placing it firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing a map, such as 'renovation', 'amphitheatre', and 'feature'. However, there are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'renovation done' instead of 'renovations made', 'children play are' (play area), and 'water feature is place' (placed). Spelling and morphological errors ('streets' instead of 'street', 'replace' instead of 'was replaced') are noticeable and occasionally cause strain for the reader, placing this response at Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex constructions. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout, including missing auxiliary verbs ('renovation done', 'fountain replaced with'), incorrect prepositions ('on both sides', 'on the left side'), and subject-verb agreement issues. Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences lacking appropriate commas or periods. These recurring errors frequently impede clarity, resulting in a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
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