Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The maps illustrate the layout of a public park in 1920 and in present.
Overall, the park underwent significant development, with some new facilities added and some existing facilities being removed.
In 1920, there were two enterances in the north and south direction which remained unchanged in present. With the south enterence there was a glasshouse in right side. To make park attractive, there was a fountain in the centre and a stage for musicians is located next to it. Moreover, there were seats and a rose garden which was located alongside eldon street and arnold street.
In present, the fountain is replaced by rose garden and seats are placed in the four sides of this garden. The stage for musicians is demolished and an amphi
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to summarise the main features of the park maps, providing a basic overview and noting some changes such as the removal of the stage and alterations to the central area. However, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 126 words. This under-length severely restricts the level of detail and comparison possible, leaving several key features omitted (such as the children's play area, the underground car park, and the café). Consequently, the response can only be awarded Band 5.0 for partially addressing the task requirements due to length and under-development.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into basic paragraphs, beginning with an introduction and an overview sentence, followed by body paragraphs detailing specific features. Logical sequencing is attempted, using introductory phrases like 'In 1920' and 'In present'. However, referencing and transitions are somewhat mechanical ('with the south enterence there was a glasshouse in right side'), and the paragraphing is incomplete as the response trails off mid-sentence at 'an amphi'. Cohesion is therefore faulty and disjointed, justifying a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for basic description, employing words such as 'layout', 'development', 'facilities', and 'demolished'. However, there are notable spelling errors ('enterances' instead of entrances, 'enterence') and awkward phrasing ('in present' instead of 'at present' or 'today'). The range of vocabulary is limited, and attempts at less common lexical items are basic. This matches the Band 5 descriptors where vocabulary is minimally adequate with noticeable errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses ('rose garden which was located alongside'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward structures, such as 'in the north and south direction' and mixing past and present tenses incorrectly in descriptions. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, cutting off abruptly. Control over grammar is limited, leading to a Band 5.0 rating.
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