Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The following diagrams illustrates the changes of a park when it was opened in 1920 and its current situation.
Overall, ther have been quite major changes in the park. Such as fountain which is now turned into a rose garden, stage of musicians has been converted into amphitheatre for concerts, a new cafe is opened, childern playground and glass house has now replaced by water feature and a new entrance has also been added.
In 1920, in the center of the park there was a fountain, with a stage of musicians to the west. There were three rose gardens, two on the arnold avenue sight and one the on the south-west sight of the park and along them there was sitting place.There were two entrances of the park, one on the arnold avenue sight and other one on the eldon street sight. Moreover, the park also had a glass house on the south-east of the park.
Today, several changes have been occured. The stage of musicians have been replace by a much bigger amphitheatre for concerts on the western sight of park. The fountain of park is remove and replaced bu rose garden. A new cafe has opened on the northern sight. An undergroung car park has been added. Furthermore, a new childern's play area have been added on the north-west sight of the park and pond water is removed. Only one of the rose garden remaisn on the north-east sight of the park along arnold avenue.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the task partially, attempting to present an overview and select main features, but it contains several inaccuracies and omissions regarding the map details. For instance, the student states that 'only one of the rose garden remains on the north-east sight', whereas the visual data shows it is actually in the north-west, and the north-east corner now contains a children's play area. Additionally, the overview lists some specific details rather than providing a clear, high-level summary of the major spatial transformations. To reach a higher band, the writer needs to ensure all reported features are factually accurate against the visual data and provide a more comprehensive, well-developed overview of the overall changes.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay displays some organisation with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding overview structure, but it lacks clear overall progression. The sequencing of information feels slightly disjointed, particularly in the body paragraphs where spatial details jump around without a smooth geographical flow. Furthermore, cohesive devices are sometimes inadequate or inaccurate, such as starting sentences abruptly with 'Such as' or mechanical transitions like 'Today, several changes have been occured.' Paragraphing is attempted, but ideas within the paragraphs are not always logically grouped. To improve, the writer should employ clearer referencing words, ensure standard paragraph breaks, and build a more logical progression from one area of the park to another.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'amphitheatre', 'converted', and 'underground car park', but struggles with accurate word choice, spelling, and collocations. Examples of lexical errors include 'stage of musicians' (instead of stage for musicians), 'sitting place' (instead of seating), 'childern' (spelling error), and 'pond water is removed' (instead of the pond for water plants). There are also recurring prepositional and collocation slips like 'on the arnold avenue sight' (site). To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their vocabulary range and improve spelling and word choice accuracy so that terms are used naturally and precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text shows a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences and basic active or passive constructions. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, such as fragment sentences ('Such as fountain which is now turned...') and severe subject-verb agreement errors ('a new childern's play area have been added'). There are also frequent errors in tense usage, passive voice formation ('have been occured', 'have been replace', 'is remove', 'remaisn'), and article usage. These frequent grammatical errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from demonstrating good control over grammar and punctuation.
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