Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram illustrates a public park when its is first open and the same park in now a days.
Overall, both diagram shows the park structure in 1920 and now a days.Garden park 1920 overview. First of all entrace left side seats for seeting and right side of the entrance glass house. Front of the entrance fountain was seen in 1920. In the garden park these thing was there, first stage for musicians,rose garden. Same structure are second side of rose garden when people are entered in 1920.
Grange park today, front and backside entrance for park are there,but one entrance more are added today park structure underground car park for cars. When people enter from arnold avenue entrance gate left side cafe and right side rose garden are situated. One more item added in park children play area,water feature. Amphitheatre for concerts are build for the concerts. Rose garden and seats are arrange around the rose garden.
They are complete imfomation, garden in 1920 and now thats all.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response addresses the task only partially, presenting an account of the changes between 1920 and today, but with limited and underdeveloped detail. While the student attempts to highlight some changes, such as the addition of a café, children's play area, and an underground car park, the information is disjointed and fails to provide a clear, well-organised overview of the main trends. Several features are described in a fragmented manner, and the comparisons between the two time periods lack clarity and precision. To move to a higher band, the response needs to select and report key features more systematically, providing a clearer overall summary of how the park has transformed over time.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
Information and ideas are not arranged coherently. The response lacks a clear overall progression, and the transitions between sentences and paragraphs feel abrupt and disconnected. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, consisting of isolated observations rather than logically linked ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal or misused, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships and comparisons between the 1920 park and the current layout. To improve, the student should ensure that ideas are sequenced logically, using appropriate cohesive markers to guide the reader smoothly through the spatial changes shown in the diagrams.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms such as 'park', 'entrance', and 'rose garden'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'now a days', 'entrace', and 'imfomation', which restrict precision. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic subject matter, the range is too limited to allow for flexibility or the effective use of less common lexical items. To achieve a higher band, the student must expand their range of vocabulary, incorporating more precise descriptive terms for spatial layouts and urban features, while also paying closer attention to spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple clauses and fragmented phrases. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('when its is first open', 'thing was there'), missing articles ('in park children play area'), and incorrect prepositional usage. These persistent errors frequently cause strain and difficulty for the reader in interpreting the intended meaning. To progress, the student needs to develop better control over basic sentence construction, ensure accurate subject-verb agreement, and use a wider variety of grammatical structures with greater accuracy.
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