Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A compherensive detail pertaining to the change occured in a public park from 1920 to today is provided in the form of a map.

The prema-fecie impression from the details is that there are various and significant changes took place withing the years and some new places were introduced and some are replaced.

To be specific,on the south east side of the map there was a glasshouse but in present time it is replaced by a water feature.Then on top north east side pond area for plants was replaced by childrens play area in current time and between of both of these area in old infrastructure there was a sitting are but nowadays it is replaced by entrance to the basement car park.on top of the graph the rose garden is shifted in the center of the park where a fountain used to be there ,with sitting facilicity all around that garden.new cafeteria is introduced in the place of old rose garden.

moreover, stage for musicians is now replaced by huge apmhitheatre for concerts and in the old infrastructure the seats were now completly disappeared. however, only on top north west side of the map a rose garden remain in its orignal place over the years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response attempts to cover the main changes shown in the maps of Grange Park between 1920 and today, presenting an overview and detailing several spatial transformations, such as the replacement of the glasshouse with a water feature and the stage with an amphitheatre. However, the information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, and certain features are either mislocated or under-developed. For instance, the central fountain's replacement is described confusingly, and some details lack the precision required for a higher level. To move beyond this level, the response needs to provide a clearer, more systematic overview of the major transformations and ensure all reported details are accurately aligned with the visual data without missing key structural shifts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay displays some basic organization with a clear paragraph structure separating the introduction, body details, and concluding observations. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by inadequate or repetitive cohesive devices, such as the repetitive use of 'then', 'now', and 'current time'. Referencing is also somewhat faulty in places, making it difficult to follow the spatial relationships between features. To achieve a higher band, the writer must use a wider and more accurate variety of cohesive markers to guide the reader smoothly through the spatial comparisons, while ensuring that paragraphs transition logically from general trends to specific location changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and contains numerous lexical errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. There are spelling errors, such as 'compherensive', 'prema-fecie', 'withing', 'apmhitheatre', and 'orignal', as well as awkward word choices and unidiomatic collocations like 'sitting facilicity'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary items, inaccurate word forms and spelling slips restrict the range. To improve lexical resource, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary related to spatial changes and urban development, ensure correct word forms, and pay closer attention to standard spelling conventions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple constructions, and attempts at complex sentences frequently feature grammatical errors. There are frequent issues with verb tenses, passive voice formation, missing articles, and punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and run-on phrasing in sentences like 'To be specific,on the south east side...'. Errors are frequent and occasionally cause strain for the reader trying to parse the syntactic relationships. To reach a higher standard, the writer must improve control over complex sentence patterns, ensure correct subject-verb agreement and article usage, and eliminate frequent punctuation and structural errors.

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