Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The map illustrates a public park first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Overall, it is clear that grange park has many changed today than before, there has many things removed and added new things they are amphitheatre, childrens play area, water feature, entrance underground car park.
To begin with, In 1920 grange park opened in first day, in the left corner there had two seats, two rose garden up and down furthermore, in the middle place of north side it had stage for musicians also two seats in east and west. subsequently, in middle place there had fountain and in the right side had one rose garden, pond for water plants and seats also in west side had glasshouse.
In addition, grange park today the two seats are change in rose garden area it has four seats but also one rose garden in left side, it has add new things like, amphitheatre for concerts, cafe, childrens play area, water feature, entrance underground car park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task partially by attempting to summarise the main features of the park in 1920 and today. However, the information is presented with significant limitations and lacks a clear, well-developed overview. While the writer notes some changes such as the addition of the amphitheatre, children's play area, and water feature, the selection of data is somewhat haphazard and confusingly detailed in places. For instance, the description of the 1920 layout lists minor positional items like seats and individual rose gardens in a repetitive, list-like manner without drawing clear comparative trends. Furthermore, the positioning of certain features is inaccurate when compared to the visual data, such as claiming the glasshouse was on the west side in 1920 when it was actually on the southern edge. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to present a clearer overall trend and select key comparative features more accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response shows some organisation with basic linking words such as 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'subsequently' to structure the text. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the arrangement of ideas feels somewhat disjointed. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of information is faulty; the second paragraph crams an excessive amount of detailed spatial description into a single, run-on sequence without clear logical breaks. Additionally, referencing is occasionally repetitive and mechanical, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact spatial relationships between the two maps. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer should use clearer paragraph breaks to separate the past layout from present changes, and employ a wider, more natural variety of cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly through the comparisons.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, relying heavily on basic, repetitive terms such as 'seats', 'rose garden', 'entrance', and 'things'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'amphitheatre', 'children's play area', and 'water feature', which are taken directly from the prompt labels. However, there are noticeable word choice errors and awkward phrasings, such as writing 'grange park has many changed today than before' and 'the two seats are change in rose garden area'. Spelling and word formation are generally basic, though meaning is occasionally obscured by clumsy lexical choices. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their vocabulary range beyond the prompt labels, using precise synonyms and collocations to describe map changes fluently and accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. The majority of sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex sentences that frequently break down. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense consistency, and prepositions, such as 'grange park opened in first day', 'there has many things removed', and 'in middle place there had fountain'. Articles and singular/plural agreements are also handled inconsistently, as seen in phrases like 'one rose garden in left side, it has add new things'. These frequent grammatical errors cause strain and difficulty for the reader. To progress to a higher band, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of complex sentence forms with improved accuracy in verb tense selection, subject-verb agreement, and prepositional usage.
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