Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This essay illustrates a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. The Grange park in 1920 looked very simple but comfortable. If I compare it today so that Grange park look like modern and fantastic.
The gate of Grange park in 1920 was from the the Eldon street. The seats are available every side of the park. Seats are available on different sides. The fountain was held in the middle of the park. The stage for musicians look like beautiful but it held on the left side of fountain. There was the beautiful rose garden on the three sides of the park one is opposite of other. The pond for water plants was also available in the corner.
Today, Grange park is look so beautiful and fantastic. There are the entrance underground car parking is available. The rose garden is replace with fountain. The seats are available around the rose garden. The Amphitheater for concerts is replace with stage for musicians. There are the cafe and children's play area. The water feature is also replace with Glasshouse.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task by comparing the two maps of Grange Park in 1920 and today, but it does so only partially. While some key changes are mentioned, such as the addition of an amphitheatre and a children's play area, the overall format relies heavily on simple, mechanical listing rather than a well-structured summary and comparison. Furthermore, the writer includes personal commentary like 'looked very simple but comfortable' and 'look like modern and fantastic', which is inappropriate for an Academic task. Some features are inaccurately described or lack sufficient extension, meaning the core information is only minimally and partially reported.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text demonstrates some basic organization with paragraphs separating the introduction, the 1920 map, and the present-day map. However, there is no clear overall progression or sophisticated logical flow. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and sometimes misused, as seen in repetitive sentence openings like 'The seats are available' and mechanical transitions such as 'Today, Grange park is look so beautiful'. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, resulting in a choppy and disjointed reading experience that lacks the smooth progression expected at higher levels.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, relying on basic words like 'look', 'beautiful', 'seats', and 'park'. There are noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'The fountain was held in the middle' instead of 'located', and awkward phrasing like 'Entrance underground car parking is available'. Spelling is generally acceptable for common words, but the overall lexical range is restricted and barely adequate for the task, causing some minor strain for the reader when attempting to grasp specific spatial descriptions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammar is characterized by a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences alongside frequent faulty attempts at complex or descriptive forms. There are numerous grammatical errors involving verb forms, tenses, articles, and prepositions. Examples include 'Grange park is look so beautiful', 'from the the Eldon street', and passive voice errors like 'The rose garden is replace with fountain'. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect a weak control of basic grammatical structures and sentence agreements.
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