Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pair of maps illustrates the changes that took place in public green space named Grange Park from 1920 to the present.

Overall, the park becomes more urbanise with many public facilities. Many amenities were included like an amphitheatre for concerts, a rose garden and a water feature. In fact, major changes took place in the middle and the northern parts of the park. However, both the entrance and a specific rose garden remain the same.

Focusing on the major changes, in 1920. there used to be a fountain in the middle and a stage for musicians toward weastern part, which was replaced by a rose garden and amphitheatre for concerts. And, the seating areas were installed around the rose garden in the centre of the park. However, in 1920, there were many seating places across the park, which is now only available at the centre of the park.

Furthermore, the cafe and the children's play area are build in the place of rose garden and pond water plants respectively. In the southeast part of the park, the glassdoor was replaced by the water feature from 1920 to the present. Additionally, new entrance was installed, which gives the facility of underground

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features of Grange Park between 1920 and today, thus meeting the requirements of a solid performance while showing elements of higher achievement. An overview is provided at the beginning, noting general trends such as urbanisation and the addition of public facilities. Key transformations are highlighted, including the replacement of the fountain and musical stage with an amphitheatre and rose garden, as well as modifications to the north and southeast corners. However, some areas are slightly under-developed or contain minor inaccuracies, such as the claim that seating is now 'only available at the centre of the park', whereas the map shows additional seats surrounding the central rose garden and other areas. Overall, the information is well-selected, presenting a clear summary of the spatial changes over time.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a logical progression of ideas from an introductory overview to specific area-by-area comparisons. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, general trends, and detailed body points. Cohesive devices are employed to link ideas, such as 'Overall', 'Focusing on the major changes', and 'Furthermore'. However, cohesion is occasionally mechanical or faulty, as seen in the slightly disjointed sentence openings and referencing issues, such as 'which is now only available at the centre', where the precise antecedent is slightly unclear. Additionally, punctuation errors like 'in 1920. there used to be' disrupt the flow of sentences. To reach the next band, referencing and logical transitions need to be executed with greater flexibility and precision.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common lexical items related to maps and urban development, such as 'urbanise', 'amenities', 'amphitheatre', and 'water feature'. However, there are noticeable word choice, word form, and spelling errors that prevent a higher score. For instance, 'urbanise' is used instead of the correct adjective form 'urbanised', 'weastern' contains a spelling error, 'cafe' lacks an accent, 'build' is used instead of the past participle 'built', and 'glassdoor' is an inaccurate lexical choice for 'glasshouse'. Despite these inaccuracies, the vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main features clearly, and meaning is rarely impeded.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating attempts at relative clauses ('which was replaced by', 'which gives the facility') and past/present tense contrasts appropriate for comparing maps across time. There are, however, some errors in grammar and punctuation that persist throughout the text. These include tense and aspect inconsistencies, such as switching awkwardly into the present tense in 'the cafe and the children's play area are build', punctuation errors like the stray period in 'in 1920. there used to be', missing articles in 'underground car park', and an incomplete sentence ending abruptly with 'underground'. These errors represent a typical pattern for this band level, where simple structures are generally controlled well, but complex attempts introduce frequent minor slips.

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