Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram provides information about the layout of public park when it was opened in 1920 and in the present.

Overall, the park has undergone several changes. Children's play area, water feature, theatre for concerts and a cafe has been added in the park, whereas fountain, pond, glass house and stage for musicians are removed from it.

Turning to the details, a rose garden with seats on every side is constructed in the centre of the park by removing a foundain. Earlier, there was a stage for musicians in the west, which is modified in a amphitheatre for concerts. Pond for water plants in the north-east corner has been fattened and a children's play area is added on its place. A cafe is built by removing rose garden, which is adjacent to play area.

Moving to further changes, seats and rose gardens near the boundaries have been demolished. A water feature has been added by removing the glass house from the south-east corner. Entrance to the parl from north and south remained same and a new entrance of underground car park has been constructed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by outlining the main changes between 1920 and the present day. An overview is provided, noting the addition of recreational facilities and the removal of older features like the fountain and stage. However, some aspects of task completion remain under-developed. For example, the description of spatial changes contains minor inaccuracies, such as stating that the pond was 'fattened' (likely a typo for flattened or filled) and mentioning that seats and rose gardens near boundaries were demolished without fully capturing their reconfiguration. To reach a higher level, the response should provide a more precise and fully extended comparison of specific layout shifts without minor confusions in geographical details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay achieves a coherent overall arrangement with a clear division into paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing specific changes. Progression is generally logical, moving from the center of the park outwards and using transitional phrases such as 'Turning to the details' and 'Moving to further changes.' However, cohesion is occasionally mechanical or faulty. The referencing and linking between sentences can feel abrupt, and cohesive devices are sometimes over-used in a formulaic manner. Improving the flow by integrating ideas more smoothly and ensuring clearer referencing of spatial features would elevate the cohesion of the response.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to maps and urban changes, such as 'layout,' 'constructed,' 'demolished,' and 'amphitheatre.' There are, nevertheless, several noticeable lexical and spelling inaccuracies, such as 'foundain' instead of fountain, 'fattened' instead of filled or replaced, and 'glass house' written as two words instead of glasshouse. Less common vocabulary items are attempted, but minor word-choice errors occur. To progress to a higher band, the writer needs to exercise greater precision in word choice and collocation, ensuring accurate spelling and natural phrasing throughout.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating a decent attempt at handling passive structures and descriptive clauses. There are grammatical errors present, such as missing articles ('layout of public park' instead of 'layout of a public park', 'added in the park' instead of 'added to the park', 'in a amphitheatre' instead of 'into an amphitheatre'), and a preposition error ('Entrance to the parl' instead of 'park'). Despite these errors, communication is rarely impeded, and meaning remains clear. To achieve a higher band, the writer must demonstrate better control over articles, prepositions within grammatical patterns, and sentence-level accuracy to produce a higher proportion of error-free sentences.

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