Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This plans shows differentiates a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, the public park will have significant development, we will construct the Underground entrance for the car parkings. at the entrance from eldon street we demolished glasshouse and seats near it and repalced with water feature. Pond for water plants has been redesigned into children's play area. at the left side of entrance from arnold avenue Rose garden has been converted into Cafe. and opposite of it Rose garden remains the same whole seats has been removed.

another major change is the stage for musicians has been redesigned into Amphitheatre for concerts and seats behind it has been removed to expand it in size. while in the center Rose garden is built and seats surronding it with all sides of it.

in 1920 we can see one less Rose Garden and same for seats although new things are added in replacement of the old one which are removed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of Grange Park in 1920 and comparing them with the modern layout. Note that 14 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the word count. An overview is present, and key changes such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden and the addition of the amphitheatre are identified. However, some parts of the response are under-developed or unclear, and the perspective shifts inappropriately to a first-person plural viewpoint when describing changes, such as writing "we will construct" and "we demolished", which is unsuited to an objective academic report. To reach a higher level, the overview needs to clearly synthesise the main global trends rather than listing isolated features, and the tone must remain entirely impersonal and formal throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text presents a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to sequence the changes from one part of the park to another. However, referencing is frequently unclear, and cohesive devices are faulty or mechanical. The writing lacks proper paragraphing, presenting nearly all information in one dense block of text, which impairs the logical progression. Pronouns and transitions like "at the left side of entrance" and "and opposite of it" create confusion regarding spatial relationships. To improve, the response needs clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, overview, and specific spatial comparisons, along with a wider range of appropriate cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly between different areas of the map.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to successfully name features such as the "rose garden", "amphitheatre", and "children's play area". There are attempts to use less common vocabulary like "re-designed", "converted", and "demolished", but these are accompanied by lexical inaccuracies and awkward word choices, such as "car parkings" instead of "car park" or "parking facilities", and spelling errors such as "surronding". Word choice errors occasionally require the reader to slow down. To achieve a higher score, the student should expand their range of functional synonyms and learn precise collocations related to describing maps and spatial transformations in academic contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in tense usage and agreement, such as opening with "This plans shows differentiates" instead of "This plan shows and differentiates", as well as missing articles and incorrect prepositional phrases like "on all four sides of it". Punctuation is also weak, with sentences beginning with lowercase letters like "at the entrance". While these errors rarely completely impede communication, they persist throughout the text. To reach a higher band, the student must eliminate basic agreement errors, maintain consistent and appropriate verb tenses for describing changes over time, and apply accurate punctuation across all sentences.

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