Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram displays the public park which was first open in 1920 and the same park today over these periods of time there were a relative changes occurred.
in 1920 when we first entered there were rose garden on both west and east side which is followed by ponds of water plants on the east side however over the periods this has been replaced by children's play area additionally a cafe which was not presents before.
In 1920 a fountain was presents which is changed by a rose garden and plenty of seats alongside.before a stage for musicians for popolar magic games but latter it was replaced by amphitheatre for concerts.
If we look at the other minor changes the distribution of seats has been changed they were distributed all over the grance park however today they has been placed around rose garden which is more organized.The water feature is also placed in east side of the park over a glasshouse before in addittionally there was also a entrance underground car park was made.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers several changes between 1920 and today, such as the introduction of a café, an amphitheatre, and an underground car park, but it addresses the task only partially. While an overview is attempted in the opening sentence, the selection of features lacks clarity and some key details are omitted or insufficiently developed. For instance, the central fountain's replacement by a rose garden and seats is mentioned, but other spatial shifts, such as the relocation of the water feature and the precise changes to the eastern and western boundaries, are described with limited clarity. The information lacks a fully developed comparative structure across the two time periods, resulting in an under-developed overview of the overall transformation of Grange Park.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text shows some organization with paragraphs attempting to separate different areas of the park, but there is no clear overall progression. Paragraphing is haphazard, and punctuation errors, such as missing capital letters and periods at the start of sentences like 'in 1920 when we first entered', severely disrupt the flow. Cohesive devices are generally inadequate or inaccurate, with repetitive connectors and unclear referencing, such as 'this has been replaced' and 'latter it was replaced', which makes it difficult to follow the spatial relationships between the past and present layouts. The lack of proper transitional phrases between sentences and paragraphs prevents a smooth reading experience.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic changes in the park, such as 'rose garden', 'fountain', 'café', and 'amphitheatre'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, including 'first open' instead of 'first opened', 'relative changes occurred' instead of 'relative changes occurred' or 'significant changes took place', and 'popolar magic games' which is unclear and inappropriate for an academic task. Spelling and word-form errors, such as 'latter' instead of 'later' and 'grance park', occur frequently enough to cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student displays a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex forms. Frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, and sentence boundaries—such as run-on sentences and missing terminal punctuation—distract from the text. There are also recurring issues with verb tenses and forms, including 'was first open', 'a fountain was presents', 'today they has been placed', and missing articles like 'there were rose garden'. These frequent errors require the reader to slow down and can cause difficulty in fully understanding the intended meaning of the comparisons.
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