Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map illustrates the public park when it was openend in 1920 and the same park today.

there are many major changes in the park today then before in 1920s.There was seats in the corners of the park and rose gardens beside then but now there are only just 2 rose gardens and the seats are removed from the corners. the fountain was in middle of park in past but not they had put a rose gaeden in middle and seats aroud it in all four sides. There was also a small stage for musicians but not they had changed it and devolp it as a much bigger ampithitheatre for concerts there.The glass house is removed and on its place there is a beautiful water feature. On the enterance from ARNOLD AVENUE there was a garden and a pond for water plants but not the pond is converted into childrens play area and the garden is coverd by a cafe.The last and final change is a under ground car parking on the right end of ELDON STREET.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by successfully outlining the main changes between Grange Park in 1920 and today, noting key transformations such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden and the addition of the amphitheatre and underground car park. However, some areas are under-developed or lack full clarity regarding precise locations. For instance, mentioning that the seats were removed from the corners overlooks the fact that seating was reconfigured around the central rose garden and amphitheatre. The overview is somewhat basic, lacking a broader summary of the park's overall modernization, which keeps this criterion at the current level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to sequence the changes from past to present across the map. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical, with an over-reliance on basic transition words and repetitive sentence starters. Paragraphing is missing entirely, as the entire response is written as a single block of text rather than distinct paragraphs for introduction, overview, and body details. Furthermore, referencing is unclear at times, such as the ambiguous pronoun use in phrases like 'beside then' and 'on its place', which disrupts the logical flow and progression for the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to map features such as 'rose gardens', 'fountain', 'amphitheatre', and 'café'. There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'openend', 'gaeden', 'aroud', 'ampithitheatre', 'devolv', and 'coverd', alongside awkward phrasing like 'on its place' instead of 'in its place'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they reveal limitations in word formation and spelling accuracy that prevent the writing from achieving a higher band descriptor level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by basic connectors or frequent tense inconsistencies. There are frequent errors in verb forms and agreement, such as 'There was seats' instead of 'There were seats', 'not they had put' instead of 'now they have put', and errors in prepositions and articles throughout the text. Punctuation is also problematic, marked by missing capitalization at the start of sentences ('there are many...') and run-on phrasing. These persistent errors in basic grammatical patterns and punctuation require effort from the reader to interpret.

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