Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans display a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, it can be seen that the Grange park has developed significantly with improved infrastructure. In contrast, new cafe, children's play area and amphitheatre has been added.

In 1920, Grange Park has two entrance in the northern and southern side. In the middle of park a fountain is located with stage for musicians beside. On the both side of stage 2 rose garden are situated with seats. In the left side of southern gate a glass house is placed where opposite to it a pond for water plants is located with rose garden nearby.

In the present, Grange park has changed significantly. The entrance have been unchanged. Fountain has been replaced with new rectangular rose garden surrounded by seats. Stage has been modified to an amphitheatre for concerts. In the place of glasshouse, a water feature is added. Pond for water plants has replaced with huge children's play area with new cafe in the place of rose garden near northern entrance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main change from a formal garden with a fountain to a park with newer recreational facilities, and you compare several features across the two plans. However, some important details are inaccurate or unclear: the 1920 plan has three rose gardens, not two beside the stage, and the pond is in the north-east corner, rather than opposite the glasshouse. The overview also says the park has “improved infrastructure,” which is broad and does not clearly summarise the main changes. To strengthen the report, describe the key replacements and the features that remain, including the north-west rose garden and the entrances, with their locations stated accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on the original plan and one on the present layout. This gives the reader a basic chronological comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because locations are described imprecisely, as in “on the both side of stage” and “where opposite to it.” The repeated opening “In 1920” and “In the present” helps signal the time contrast, but links between individual features are limited. Organise each description by area—for example, north, centre and south—and use clear location phrases so that the reader can trace changes across the park more easily.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “amphitheatre” and “rectangular,” and you attempt to describe replacement with phrases such as “has been replaced.” This gives you a minimally adequate range for the task. However, several word choices and collocations are imprecise or repetitive: “improved infrastructure” is vague for these changes, while “new cafe” and “changed significantly” recur without adding much detail. “Glass house” is also normally written as one word, “glasshouse.” Aim for more precise map language, such as “occupies the north-east corner” or “was converted into,” and check spelling and natural combinations of words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including passive constructions such as “Fountain has been replaced” and “Stage has been modified.” However, errors are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or difficult to interpret. Examples include “Grange Park has two entrance,” “The entrance have been unchanged,” and “In the place of glasshouse, a water feature is added,” which show problems with articles, plurals, agreement and tense. The sentence beginning “On the both side” is also structurally unclear. Use past tense consistently for the 1920 plan and present tense for today, and check subject–verb agreement and articles before submitting.

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