Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two given plans illustrates that comparison between a public park when it is organised in 1920 and the same park nowadays.

Overall, both public parks have some difference like changes in the park as increasing the developement in the surrounding. Fountain is replaced by the rose garden and also keep some siting area around this small garden. Also remove musicians stage and buit amphithertre for concerts that are makeing easy for all the visitors.

Nowadays, all the facilities are increasing with the increase of populations. Although, some parks, museums and other public spaces where all the visitors and tourist attract and visit there. In this park rose garden is removed from the left side of the entrance with the passage o time after that build a cafetaria that it would be convinced for all the visitors.

Moreover, children play area is constructed after the diminishing of pond of water plants. In the opposite side of children play ground build a water feature after removal of glasshouse. In the whole park seats are completely vanished and only construct in the centre of the park its just the besides of the rose garden.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden, the musicians’ stage giving way to an amphitheatre, and the pond and glasshouse being replaced by a play area and water feature. However, the overview is not consistently clear: the claim that facilities are increasing with population growth is not shown by the plans, and the statement that seats have “completely vanished” is inaccurate, since seats remain around the central garden and elsewhere. Some locations are also imprecise, such as saying the café replaces a garden “on the left side” of the entrance. Focus on the main changes visible in the plans and describe their positions accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and uses basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “Although,” so there is an attempt to organise the comparison. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview mixes map changes with unsupported general comments about population and public spaces. “Although” does not introduce a complete contrast, and several sentences combine multiple changes without clear relationships. The final paragraph, for example, moves from the play area to the water feature and then to seating, while the seating claim is also unclear. Grouping changes by area or by what was replaced, and using direct comparisons between 1920 and today, would make the account easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “amphitheatre,” “pond,” and “glasshouse,” which helps communicate the main features. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, sometimes making meaning harder to understand: “siting area” for seating, “buit amphithertre,” “cafetaria,” and “diminishing of pond.” Phrases such as “increasing the development in the surrounding” and “makeing easy” are also unnatural. Aim for precise, conventional expressions such as “seating areas,” “was replaced by,” and “the surrounding area.” Check spelling carefully, especially for key features shown on the plans.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use longer structures, including “Although, some parks…” and “after the diminishing of pond…,” but these are often incomplete or faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in the opening (“plans illustrates”) and overview (“that are makeing easy”), while articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent. For example, “In the opposite side of children play ground build a water feature” lacks a clear subject and has an incorrect prepositional pattern. The final sentence also joins ideas in a way that obscures the meaning. Practise building accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence structure.

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