Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map illustrate the changes that have taken place in Grange park between 1920 the present day.

Overall, park has undergone significant redevelopment.Several original features,including the fountain,rose garden,pond for water plant have been removed and replaced.Stage for musicians not present in today map and in that place amphitheater for concerts is built.Glass house is placed by water features.In today map seating area present all arround the rose garden buit in old map seating area was at different places.One more thing included in that map that is cafe.In both maps one thing is still unchangesd that is enterence ponits.

Many changes taken from ancient to resent map, there were two rose gardens but now one is disappeared now adays.The over all look showes that there were many things in ancient grange park and more things to ;ook and visit but toady somethings remover and new changes accured toady park also have a childrens park area which was not in previous park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change from a traditional garden to a redeveloped park, and you mention several accurate comparisons: the central fountain is replaced by a rose garden, the western stage area becomes an amphitheatre, and the former pond area is now a children’s play area. You also note the café and the water feature. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the park has three rose gardens in 1920 and two today, rather than “two rose gardens” originally, and the entrances remain at the north and south, with an additional underground car-park entrance shown today. The overview is relevant, but the final comments about the park having “more things to look and visit” are vague. Organise the key changes more precisely and cover the main locations consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an opening, an overview, and further detail, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several comparisons are crowded into one long paragraph, followed by a second paragraph that repeats the idea of change without adding a clear structure. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “One more thing,” and “In both maps” help signal relationships, but some connections are unclear—for example, “Glass house is placed by water features” does not clearly explain the change from the former glasshouse to the present water feature. Group details by area or by what was retained, removed, and added, and use clear references to distinguish the two maps. This would create a more logical progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “redevelopment,” “replaced,” “amphitheater,” “seating area,” and “entrance points.” This gives you a basic range for describing changes. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning harder to follow, as in “unchangesd,” “enterence,” “resent,” and “remover.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “things to look and visit” and “Glass house is placed by water features.” Use standard map-description collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for locations and changes—such as “in the north-east corner” or “was converted into”—would help you report the plan more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a comparison with “but” and a relative clause in “one thing that is still unchangesd.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening needs subject–verb agreement and an article: “The map illustrates…”; the time expression should be “between 1920 and the present day.” Several sentences lack clear sentence boundaries, and punctuation is often missing, as in “redevelopment.Several” and “replaced.Stage.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, and verb forms, including “park has undergone” and “Glass house is placed.” These errors sometimes obscure relationships between features. Practise accurate sentence boundaries and basic agreement while retaining a few well-controlled complex comparisons.

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