Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two illustrations show the changes in the two parks form when they are first established in 1920 untill now.

Overall, the main changes are the aphitheatre for concerts, the relocation of the rose garden with seats, chlidren's play area instead of the pond, and water feature in place of the glasshouse.

When we take a glance at the 1920's Grande Park, there was a stage for musicians neighbouring with two rose gardens opposite to each other and two seating areas. A fountain in the middle of the two entrances.A glasshouse next to the Eldon street's entrance with a seating area next to it. And from the Arnold avenue's entrance, there was another rose garden and a pond for water plants.

Today's Grande park, there is a big amphitheatre instead of the stage for concerts and next to it there is one of the rose garden. The other rose garden resides in the middle of the park where the fountain was located at. The rose garden is surrounded by four seating areas, each on one side.Next to Arnold avenue's entrance the rose garden was replaced with a cafe and next to it there is a new children's area in place of the pond. And from Eldon street's entrance, a water feature is built instead of the glasshouse.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from a formal garden with a central fountain to a park with a central rose garden and surrounding seats, and you compare several former and current uses, including the pond/play area and glasshouse/water feature. This gives the reader a relevant overview and addresses the task. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the central rose garden is described as a relocation, although the original central feature was the fountain; the north-west rose garden remains, while the south-west one is replaced by the amphitheatre. The café and children’s play area are also separate features, but “next to it” makes their relationship less precise. Include the unchanged entrances and north-west garden in a clearer overview, and distinguish retained features from replacements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the 1920 and present-day layouts. This makes the comparison easy to follow in broad terms. You also use time markers such as “When we take a glance at the 1920’s” and “Today’s” to signal the two periods. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear, particularly repeated “next to” and “instead of,” and the 1920 description becomes a series of sentence fragments: “A fountain in the middle…” and “A glasshouse next to…”. The relationship between the features is sometimes difficult to track. Use complete sentences and organise each period by area—for example, north, centre, and south—to create smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing a park plan, including “fountain,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre,” “pond for water plants,” and “surrounded by.” These terms help communicate the main changes, and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, several spelling errors, including “aphitheatre,” “chlidren’s,” and “untill,” as well as inconsistent naming (“Grande Park” rather than “Grange Park”). Some choices are imprecise or unnatural: “relocation” suggests the rose garden was moved, while “resides” is not a natural way to describe its position on a plan. Aim for accurate labels and concise location language such as “is situated” or “occupies the centre.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex structures, including comparisons with “instead of” and clauses describing where features were located. Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems remain. For example, “A fountain in the middle of the two entrances” is a fragment, and “there was a stage … neighbouring with two rose gardens” has an awkward grammatical construction. In “Today's Grande park, there is…” the opening phrase is not correctly connected to the main clause. There are also inconsistent past and present forms when describing the current plan. Use complete clauses, maintain present tense for today’s layout, and check sentence boundaries and articles to improve accuracy.

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