Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In 1920, the Grange Park had two main attraction namely the fountain and the stage for musicians. The garden consisted of two entrances and had three rose gardens with a scaterred seating arrangement. The park also had a pond dedicated to the water plants and a glasshouse.

The Grange Park today has Amphitheatre as it's main attraction. The seating arrangement is organised around a rose garden. The park includes a cafe and a separate children's play area along with a water feature. The park also features a underground car park.

Comparing the two gardens, we can observe that the current arrangement is better organised. Presently, the park consists of two rose gardens instead of two and the seating is around the bigger garden. The garden in the past lacked cafe and children's play area however, it had a glasshouse which has been removed in the current setting. In the past, the park had no underground parking which is included in the current scheme to accomodate the growing vehicle utilisation by the public.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both time periods and identify several important changes, including the replacement of the fountain by a central rose garden, the addition of a café and play area, and the removal of the glasshouse. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the park had three rose gardens in 1920, not “two,” and it has two today, not “two instead of two.” The overview also misses notable changes such as the pond becoming a children’s play area and the western stage and rose garden being replaced by an amphitheatre. The claim that the current layout is “better organised” is an unsupported judgement rather than a neutral summary. More precise comparisons and a clearer overview would make the main features more fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it first describes the 1920 park, then the present layout, and finally compares them. This gives the reader a clear time-based progression, and linking phrases such as “Comparing the two gardens” and “however” help connect ideas. The comparison paragraph, though, moves between rose gardens, seating, facilities and parking without a consistent spatial or thematic order. The phrase “two rose gardens instead of two” also makes the comparison difficult to follow. Grouping changes by area—for example, central features, western facilities and the northern and southern edges—and using clearer references would improve progression. The organisation is effective overall, but cohesion is not yet consistently precise or flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “fountain,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre,” “seating arrangement” and “water feature,” so the map is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “dedicated to” and “current setting.” However, some choices are imprecise or awkward: “main attraction” is less suitable than “main feature,” “scattered seating arrangement” does not clearly describe the seats’ locations, and “vehicle utilisation” is unnatural in this context. Spelling errors such as “scaterred” and “accomodate,” along with “cafe” without the accent, also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise location language and natural collocations when describing changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “The garden in the past lacked cafe and children's play area however, it had a glasshouse.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “two main attraction” needs plural agreement, while “a underground car park” requires the correct article. The sentence beginning “Presently” contains an unclear comparison, and punctuation is needed before “however.” There are also inconsistent article and number choices in phrases such as “has Amphitheatre” and “two rose gardens instead of two.” Check articles, singular and plural forms, and punctuation around linking words; greater accuracy in these areas would strengthen the otherwise understandable range.

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