Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given map shows the information about the construction changes in a public park from, when it first opened in 1920 and plan for today.

First of all, there was a fountain in the middle and opposit to the entrance that will be changed into the rose garden seats around it, to accomodate the visitors. Entrance will be same on two sides of park. There was a rose garden at the right side of the entrance, that will be demolished and a new cafe will build there.

Another noticeable change will be the expansion of stage for musicians with the facility of the Amphitheatre for concerts with numerous seats and a long hall. Additionally, Children's play area will b developed at the place of pond for water plants, to entertain the kids.

Water feature, a beautifull waterfall will be added at the place of glass house near the entrance of Eldon Street to beautify the park. Moreover,Underground entrance will also be constructed near the water feature. However, Rose garden near the entrance on the left side will remain same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden with seats around it, the pond being replaced by a children’s play area, and the glasshouse site becoming a water feature. You also note that the entrances and the north-west rose garden remain. However, the response does not give a clear overall summary of how the park has changed, and some details are inaccurate or unsupported: the water feature is not specified as a waterfall, and the amphitheatre is not described as having a “long hall.” The western change is also presented as an expansion of the musicians’ stage, rather than its replacement by an amphitheatre. Covering these key transformations more accurately and distinguishing retained features from replacements would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a generally understandable sequence: it moves from the central area to the northern side, then the west and south-east, and uses separate paragraphs to group changes. Linking expressions such as “Additionally” and “Moreover” help signal added information. However, the opening does not provide a clear overview, so the reader has to infer the main pattern of change. Some connections are also awkward or unclear, particularly “opposit to the entrance” and “However, Rose garden near the entrance on the left side will remain same.” Use a concise overview after the introduction, then organise the details by area or by what was retained and replaced. More precise referencing would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “Amphitheatre,” “pond for water plants,” and “water feature,” so the main locations and facilities are usually identifiable. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “to entertain the kids” and “to beautify the park,” though these are less suitable for a neutral map report. Several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “construction changes,” “will be demolished,” and “long hall”; the map shows changes in park features, not necessarily construction or demolition, and no hall is indicated. Spelling errors such as “opposit,” “accomodate,” and “beautifull” also reduce accuracy. Prefer precise, neutral terms such as “replaced by” and “located in.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “that” and additions introduced by “Additionally” and “Moreover.” The main ideas are generally recoverable, but errors in verb forms and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “from, when it first opened” has an unnecessary comma and an awkward clause, while “a new cafe will build there” needs a passive form (“will be built”). Tense is also inconsistent: the response shifts between “there was” and “will be changed” without clearly establishing that the map compares 1920 with the present. Other examples include “Rose garden … will remain same,” which needs an article and “the same.” Practise accurate past-versus-present descriptions and check articles, passive forms, and sentence boundaries.

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