Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The diagrams display the layout of a public park and illustrates how it has changed over the period since its establishment in 1920.

Overall, it is evident that the park has developed over the time period to facilitate the visitors. New features such as a cafe and a play area are installed while existing facilities, like the stage for musicians, are upgraded. An underground car park is another addition to it. The park has become more organized in present.

Majority of changes made to the park included rearranging the layout. In 1920, there were five different seating areas and three rose gardens located alongside the walls of the park. Currently, one rose garden remains next to an entrance while a square garden is placed in the centre of the map, one seat surround each of the walls of this garden. Although, the older map displays a glass house, it is removed later on.

The fountain and the pond for water plants, which are present in the older map, are replaced by a water feature area. Similarly, the amphitheatre is the entertainment renovation of the earlier known stage for musicians.

An underground car park is another innovation that makes the park more convenient now.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear overview of the park’s development, identifying new facilities and the replacement or upgrading of older ones. Several key comparisons are accurate: the central fountain is replaced by a rose garden, the musicians’ stage becomes an amphitheatre, and the glasshouse is removed. You also report the café, play area and underground car park. However, some details are imprecise or misleading. The rose garden that remains is in the north-west, not “next to an entrance”; the central garden is rectangular, and the seats surround it on all four sides rather than being “one seat” by each wall. The water feature replaces the glasshouse, not both the fountain and pond. More precise locations and a clearer account of the pond’s replacement would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs describing changes. The progression from general development to layout and then individual facilities is broadly logical, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Similarly” and “Although” help connect ideas. However, some connections are unclear or mechanically expressed. In “The fountain and the pond … are replaced by a water feature area,” the relationship between two former features and one current feature is confusing, while “Similarly” does not precisely explain the change from stage to amphitheatre. The final sentence repeats the underground car park point from the overview. Grouping changes by location or by what was replaced, and using clearer references, would make the progression more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing change, including “layout,” “rearranging,” “remains,” “replaced” and “innovation.” These choices allow you to report the main transformations, and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “seating areas” and “entertainment renovation,” but some expressions are imprecise or unnatural. “Facilitate the visitors” does not clearly describe the park’s development, and “one seat surround each of the walls” is an awkward way to describe seating around the central garden. “Entertainment renovation” is not a natural collocation for the amphitheatre replacing the stage. More precise map vocabulary and natural collocations would build on your adequate range and improve accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “The fountain and the pond for water plants, which are present in the older map…” and a concessive clause beginning “Although.” Most sentences communicate the intended comparison, but some grammatical errors remain. The opening has a subject–verb agreement error: “The diagrams … illustrates” should be “illustrate.” In “one seat surround,” the verb should agree with the plural subject (“seats surround”), and “Although” is incorrectly followed by a comma before the main clause. There are also tense and article inconsistencies, such as “are installed” when describing changes shown in the present-day plan. Check agreement, punctuation and consistent tense when revising.

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