Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given visuals illustrate the layouts of a public park between 1920 and today.

The Grange park has underwent a lot of development since it's opening in 1920. Earlier, there used to be a fountain in the middle of the park, which is now replaced with a rose garden surrounded with seats on four sides.Similarly the rose garden which was on the right side of the Arnold avenue entrance is replaced with a cafe.The pond for water plants, which was located near the rose garden is converted into a children's play area.The seats which were situated near the boundary of the park were removed.There was an addition of water feature on the right side of the Eldon street entrance, where glass house used to be present.The rose garden which was located on the left side of the Eldon street was removed and an open space is present in that place. Stage for musician which was located on the left side of the fountain is replaced with an Amphitheatre for concerts.

Overall, Numerous changes have been done since 1920.Some things have been replaced and others are introduced. Only the entrances and the north-west rose garden remain same, rest everything have been replaced or changed.The overall look of today's park is completely different compared with the park of 1920.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation in the centre—the fountain becoming a rose garden with seats—and accurately describe several other changes, including the café, play area, water feature and amphitheatre. You also provide an overview that the park has changed substantially. This covers the task well, with some detail beyond a simple list. However, a few comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: the south-west rose garden was removed as the amphitheatre expanded into that area, but the north-east pond was not “near the rose garden”; it occupied the north-east corner. The statement that “rest everything have been replaced or changed” also overgeneralises, since the north-west rose garden remains and some seating is retained or rearranged. Clarifying these points and describing the retained features more precisely would make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response includes an opening, a sequence of comparisons and a concluding overview, and the reader can generally follow the changes. Linking expressions such as “Similarly,” “The pond…” and “There was an addition…” help connect individual features. However, most information is packed into one long paragraph, while the overview appears at the end rather than guiding the comparison. The repeated sentence pattern—one feature “is replaced” or “is converted”—makes the progression feel list-like, and “Only the entrances and the north-west rose garden remain same” is not clearly connected to the preceding details. Organise the response into a short overview paragraph followed by grouped comparisons, such as the northern, central and western/southern areas, and use clearer referencing to improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing map changes, including “surrounded,” “replaced,” “converted” and “addition,” so the main developments are understandable. There is some useful variety in the names of park features. However, several choices or forms are imprecise or repetitive: “a lot of development” is vague, “open space” is not an accurate description of what replaced the south-west garden, and “the overall look…is completely different” is a broad, informal summary. “Glass house” is also conventionally written as “glasshouse” here. Aim for more precise map language and vary verbs such as “was replaced by,” “was removed” and “was retained.” This would make the description more exact and less dependent on repeated general wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including relative clauses such as “which is now replaced…” and “which was located near the rose garden,” and most meanings remain clear. However, some errors recur in verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “has underwent” should be “has undergone,” “since it's opening” should be “since its opening,” and “rest everything have been” needs subject–verb agreement (“everything else has been”). The sentence beginning “Earlier” runs into the next sentence without a space after “sides.” There are also awkward tense choices in “is now replaced” and “used to be present.” Review past-to-present comparison forms and check each sentence for agreement and punctuation. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control.

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