Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two plans illustrate how a public park has changed between its opening in 1920 and the present day. Overall the park has been considerably modernised, with Amphitheatre for concerts by replacing with stage for musicians. However the entrance has remained largely unchanged.

In today park there were many changes has been seen firstly 1920 if we walk through entrance there was a seats and rose garden left and right hand side of a entrance, they were replaced by a cafe in today park. There was a fountain located in centre of the park in 1920 were converted into a large rose gardens with seats all around.In left hand side of founain the stage for musicians was present in 1920 and they were also be converted into Amphitheatre for concerts. In right corner of the park in 1920 there was a pond for water plants ans they also replaced by children play area and last in bottom corner the glasshouse was seen in 1920 which also be modified into water feature in today park.

There is car park undergrounf entrance present in today park and the eldon street were remain unchanged.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from a formal garden with a fountain and musician’s stage to a more modern park, and you compare several former and current uses accurately: the pond becomes a children’s play area, the glasshouse becomes a water feature, and the western stage area becomes an amphitheatre. The opening overview also notes that the entrances remain largely unchanged. However, the overview contains a reversed comparison: it says the amphitheatre replaced the stage, whereas the stage was replaced by the amphitheatre. Some details are unclear or incomplete, including the central rose garden’s arrangement and the north-west rose garden that remains. A more precise overview and clearer coverage of retained features would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview and a body paragraph, and it generally moves through the park’s features in a sensible sequence. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In left hand side,” and “last” help signal relationships. However, the body is largely one long paragraph, and the repeated pattern of describing a feature and saying it was replaced makes the progression feel mechanical. Some references are difficult to follow, particularly “they” in “they were replaced” and “they also be converted,” because the reader must infer which features are meant. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped changes, and connect locations more clearly with phrases such as “in the north-east” or “by contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a park plan, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “pond,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature.” This gives you an adequate range for reporting the main changes. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “changed,” “modified into,” and “converted into,” while “in today park” is not a natural expression. Spelling errors such as “founain” and “undergrounf” also reduce precision. Aim for accurate map-description language, including “was replaced by,” “is now located,” and “remains,” and check spelling carefully. These improvements would make the descriptions clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a comparison of the park’s former and current features. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur in many clauses and sometimes make relationships unclear. For example, “In today park there were many changes has been seen” combines incompatible verb forms, while “the eldon street were remain unchanged” has incorrect agreement and verb structure. The sentence beginning “In left hand side of founain” also lacks a clear grammatical frame. Practise forming accurate past and present passive structures, such as “The pond was replaced by a play area,” and use shorter sentences when describing several locations. More reliable control of these patterns is needed.

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