Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The flowchart above shows the Grange public park from when it initially open in 1920, to its current appearance today.

In the images shown, it is clear that over the years, series of changes have been made which have altered the original outline of the Grange public park since 1920. Some new things were added while others were replaced.

Let’s begin with the two entrances of the park, which were on Eldon street and Arnold avenue in 1920 were not altered although, an underground car park was introduced at the right corner of the park. The glasshouse that was present in the initial opening was replaced by a water feature, the seats beside the glasshouse in 1920 was removed. The pond opposite the glasshouse was replaced by a children play area and the rose garden beside it was changed to a cafe.

The fountain in front of each entrance was removed and a rose garden surrounded by seats. The stage for musicians was also changed to an Amphitheatre where they held concerts. The rose garden and seats on the left side of the stage were removed and the seats to its right were also removed leaving only the rose garden.

Over the years a lot of changes have been made to the park as reflected in the diagram.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation from a park with a fountain and several gardens to one with a central rose garden, and you compare several former and current uses, including the glasshouse becoming a water feature and the pond becoming a play area. The opening also establishes that the park is being compared across time. Some details, however, are inaccurate or unclear: the fountain was in the centre, not “in front of each entrance,” and the rose garden beside the pond was replaced by a café, rather than simply being described as “beside it” without specifying its former northern-edge position. The account also misses the north-west rose garden’s unchanged position and the café/play-area additions as part of a clear overview. The response covers the task, but more precise and complete comparisons would strengthen it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a general statement about change, and paragraphs describing particular areas. This gives the reader a basic route through the comparison. However, progression is weakened by the repeated, broad statements “Some new things were added while others were replaced” and “Over the years a lot of changes have been made,” which add little information. The sequence also shifts between entrances, the south-east, the north-east and the centre without a consistent spatial pattern. Some references are difficult to follow, especially “the rose garden beside it” and “the rose garden and seats on the left side of the stage,” because the locations and time period are not explicit. Organise details by area or by 1920-to-today changes, and use clearer referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing changes, including “replaced,” “removed,” “introduced” and “surrounded by,” and these choices generally communicate the map’s main developments. There are also attempts at more specific terms such as “underground car park” and “Amphitheatre.” Some word choices are imprecise or unsuitable for a map description: “flowchart” should be “plans” or “maps,” “initially open” is not the natural phrase for the park’s opening, and “in front of each entrance” misdescribes the fountain’s location. “Things” and “a lot of changes” are also vague. Use precise location language such as “in the north-east corner” and “along the southern edge,” and choose formal, accurate terms for features and their positions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including a relative clause in “the stage for musicians was also changed to an Amphitheatre where they held concerts.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems are noticeable. For example, “from when it initially open” needs a past-tense form (“opened”), while “the two entrances … which were … were not altered although” creates an awkward, incomplete connection between clauses. In “the seats beside the glasshouse … was removed,” the plural subject requires “were removed”; “a children play area” also needs a possessive form (“children’s”). Capitalisation and comma use are inconsistent, particularly in “Eldon street and Arnold avenue … although.” Check verb agreement, tense, articles and clause boundaries, while retaining your attempts at longer sentence forms.

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