Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given map displays the changes 120 year old in public park which ois known as grange park.

Firstly, we will discuss the enterance of the park here we can see on the left side of the park there is a rose garden exist in 1920 but now there is a cafe and a attach childern play area. If we look on the right side there are seats where people can sit but now the seat section is removed and there is nothing.

Secondly, in 1920 the park has a fountain in the centre but nowadays there is no foutain we can see clear there are beanches in the centre where people can sit and spend quality time in the park.

thirdly, we can see that in 1920 the stage of musicians is placed on the right side of the park but now there is a theatre for concerts

At the end we will see a littlr bit chaning on the right side of the elson street entrance there is a water feature in the peresent but in 1920 there is a glasshouse

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant changes, including the replacement of the central fountain, the concert venue in the western area, and the water feature replacing the glasshouse. However, the account is incomplete and includes important inaccuracies. The northern café is described as replacing a rose garden, but the children’s play area is incorrectly said to be beside it; it is actually in the north-east corner, replacing the pond. You also say the seats on the right have been removed, although seats remain in the present-day plan, and the central rose garden surrounded by seats is misreported as benches. The overview is missing, and several major changes, such as the underground car-park entrance and the retained north-west rose garden, are omitted. Select and compare the main features more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the entrance area to the centre, the western side and finally the southern edge. Markers such as “Firstly,” “Secondly” and “At the end” help signal this order, and the reader can generally follow the intended comparisons. However, the organisation is mechanical and the opening does not provide a clear overview of the park’s overall transformation. Some transitions are awkward, and the long first section combines several locations without clearly distinguishing them. Grouping the information into a concise overview followed by paragraphs on the northern/central and western/southern changes would create clearer progression. Use linking phrases to show specific contrasts, rather than relying mainly on numbered sequencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “stage,” “concerts” and “water feature,” so the basic subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description less precise: “benches” is used for the central rose garden surrounded by seats, “theatre” is less accurate than “amphitheatre,” and “enterance,” “foutain” and “childern” are misspelled. Phrases such as “a littlr bit chaning” and “spend quality time” are informal or unclear for an academic map report. Build a more precise set of location and change expressions, such as “in the north-east corner,” “was replaced by,” and “remains unchanged,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences and comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between features unclear. For example, “the changes 120 year old in public park” has an incorrect structure, while “there is a rose garden exist in 1920” mixes incompatible verb forms. Tense use is also unreliable: past features should generally be described with past forms, while the current plan can be described in the present. Articles and sentence boundaries need attention, as in “there is a cafe and a attach childern play area.” Most sentences follow simple patterns, and the attempts at more complex clauses are often faulty. Practise accurate past-versus-present comparisons and build sentences around clear subjects and verbs.

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