Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The figures illustrate a public park called grange park, when it opened in 1920 for the first time and how it look now.

Looking from an overall perspective, rose garden is located in the middle of the park with seatings surrounded the garden. Fountain and glass house is demolished while a new water feature is developed.

In 1920, there was a fountain in the center of the park next to it there was a stage for musicians. From entrance of Arnold avenue there was two rose garden on both left and right side and a pond for water plants was made at the corner. While entrance from the Eldon street contained glass house on right side. Seats are surrounded by the boundary of the park

However, today there is a rose garden in the center of the park surrounded by seats. Stage is replaced by Ampitheatre for concerts. Meanwhile, water feature is built in place of glasshouse. New children's play area is established at the corner where initially pond is located. The parking facility is also improved by providing underground car park

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation from a central fountain to a rose garden surrounded by seats, and you compare several former and current features, including the stage and amphitheatre, pond and play area, and glasshouse and water feature. This gives the response a relevant overview and covers the principal changes. However, some details are inaccurate or incomplete: the 1920 rose gardens were not both beside the Arnold Avenue entrance, and the café replacing the northern rose garden and the retained north-west rose garden are omitted. The statement that the park’s seating is around its boundary is also too general. To strengthen the response, describe locations more precisely and include the café and the unchanged entrance arrangement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the earlier and present layouts. This makes the comparison easy to follow, and transitions such as “In 1920” and “However, today” help signal the time contrast. Some links between ideas are less controlled, though. For example, “there was a fountain in the center of the park next to it there was a stage” joins two clauses without suitable punctuation or a linking structure. The overview also moves abruptly from the central garden to the fountain and glasshouse. Grouping changes by location or by what was replaced, and using clearer sentence boundaries and references, would make progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “pond for water plants,” “underground car park,” and “replaced,” so the main features are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific terms, such as “amphitheatre” and “water feature.” However, some word choices and collocations are imprecise: “figures illustrate” is not suitable for a plan, “seatings” is not the natural term for park benches, and “developed” is awkward for a feature being added. Spelling and capitalisation also need attention, notably “Ampitheatre” and the inconsistent use of proper names. Use standard map-description vocabulary and check spelling to improve precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including time contrasts and relative clauses such as “where initially pond is located.” The main meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, tense, and sentence boundaries. Examples include “how it look now,” “rose garden is located,” and “Fountain and glass house is demolished”; these need appropriate verb forms and agreement. The sentence beginning “In 1920” runs two independent clauses together, while “From entrance of Arnold avenue there was two rose garden” has several structural problems. Practise accurate past and present descriptions, plural agreement, and punctuation when joining clauses; these corrections would make your varied sentence attempts more reliable.

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