Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two maps illustrate the information regarding the development in the Grange Park from the year 1920 to 2026 after the addition of few amenities in the park.

It is evident from the map that a fountain was situated in the centre of park whereas a new rose garden is now built there which is covered by the seats that are also constructed there. Moreover, the entrance has remained same as it was earlier. Also, an children's play area is built at the north east part of the map which has taken the place for pond for water plants.

Furthermore, at the east zone of the map, an stage for musicians was present there which is now taken off and an amphitheatre for concerts is built. Consequently, in the year 1920, many seats was situated at the all parts of map but now the seats are shifted to the heart zone of the park.

Hence, it is lucid from the overall analysis, that a huge transformation can be seen after the construction of few amenities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond being replaced by a play area, and the addition of an amphitheatre. However, the account only partially covers the plans: it omits notable features such as the café, water feature, underground car-park entrance, and the glasshouse’s replacement. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the stage was in the western area, not the east, and seats were not all shifted to the centre; several remain around the park. The overview that there was a “huge transformation” is broad rather than a clear summary of the main pattern. To strengthen the response, compare the key changes accurately and include the main additions and removals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the central area to the north-east and then the western area, and linking phrases such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” help signal additions. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the final paragraph introduces a general conclusion without bringing together the main changes, while “Hence” and “Consequently” do not always express the relationship between the details accurately. The information is also grouped unevenly, with several important changes omitted and no clear distinction between an overview and detailed comparisons. Organise the response into a concise overview followed by paragraphs comparing locations or describing the main replacements; use linking words only where their meaning fits.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “centre,” “north east,” “fountain,” “rose garden,” and “amphitheatre.” There are also attempts at more formal wording, such as “transformation” and “amenities.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise, including “development in the park,” “taken off,” “heart zone,” and “lucid from the overall analysis.” Repetition of “built” and “map” also limits the range, and “east zone” contributes to an inaccurate description of the stage’s location. Aim for precise map language and natural collocations, such as “was replaced by,” “in the north-east corner,” and “the park underwent several changes.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “whereas” and “which,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. However, errors recur in articles, agreement, and sentence construction. Examples include “centre of park” (missing “the”), “an children’s play area” and “an stage” (incorrect article), and “many seats was situated” (subject–verb disagreement). “The entrance has remained same” also needs an article before “same.” Some sentences are long and awkwardly joined, which makes relationships between ideas less clear. Review article use and plural agreement, and practise building direct comparison sentences with accurate past and present forms.

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