Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plans udner this showing a public park when it was first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

This garden is situated in the Eldon Street . It have fountain in it and grass house ,stage for musicians , two beautifuk Rose gardens , beautiful enterance and pond for water plants glasshouse and have places for sitting it have desks. It is a beautiful place in 1920. It's named as Grange Park in 1920 .

The garden has so many changes today it have just one rose garden, cafeteria , pond for water plants is changed into children's play area now and glasshouse is converted into water feature. Now It has three entrances one is for car parking and those people who park their vehicles they come from this entrance it is near to the water feature and other one is in the Eldon Street and the third one is opened in Arnold avenue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the park’s name and describe several changes, including the replacement of the pond by a children’s play area and the glasshouse by a water feature. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the main transformation, and some details are inaccurate or unclear: there is one central rose garden today, not “just one rose garden” as a complete account of the changes, and the park’s entrances are not all newly created. Important features such as the amphitheatre and café are only briefly mentioned, while the 1920 layout is described imprecisely. The response is also 3 words below the required minimum; the 9 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Add a concise overview and report the main changes more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic chronological structure: it first describes the park in 1920 and then turns to its present-day layout. This gives the reader a simple way to follow the comparison. However, the ideas within each paragraph are mostly listed rather than grouped by location or type of change, and the long second paragraph contains several features without clear relationships between them. Linking is limited, with “and” repeated, while “Now” signals the final section but does not create a fuller progression. Organise the details into clearer groups—for example, changes in the north, centre and south—and use references such as “by contrast” or “in the south-east” to make connections more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “fountain,” “pond for water plants,” “children’s play area,” and “water feature.” These terms help communicate several key changes. However, the range is limited and some choices are inaccurate or informal for this task: “cafeteria” does not match the map’s label “café,” “desks” is not an appropriate term for park seating, and “beautiful” is repeated without adding useful information. Spelling errors such as “udner,” “beautifuk,” and “enterance” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Use precise map vocabulary and vary verbs such as “replaced,” “remained,” and “was converted into” to describe the changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally identify the two time periods being described. However, grammatical control is weak and errors occur frequently. Examples include “This garden … showing,” “It have fountain,” and “The garden has so many changes today it have,” where verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. Articles and agreement are also problematic in phrases such as “in the Eldon Street” and “it have desks.” Several ideas are joined into long, poorly punctuated sentences, making relationships between features difficult to follow. Practise accurate present and past forms, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries; for example, separate the description of the 1920 park from the list of its features.

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