Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans represent the Grange parc when he opened the first time in 1920 and the changes on him today.

Overall, many changes happened such the rose garden and stage of musicians as make the park completely with new view.

In 1920, the parc was represent two defferent entrances in the north at arnold avenue and in the south at Eldon street. The garden was have many seats distributed on defferent places in the east and the western sides of the garden. In the middle there was a fountain and stage for musicians, also in the east of the south entrance there was a glasshouse, and also defferent rose gardns spread on defferent places in the garden.

In recent time, many modifications happend. The south entrance changed by the underground parc car entrance, also the fountain removed and replaced by big rose garden and circled by many seats. Furthermore, the stage of musicians replaced by amphitheatre of concerts and finally the the glass house by water

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast between the original park and its present layout, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the musicians’ stage becoming an amphitheatre, and the glasshouse being replaced by a water feature. You also mention the underground car-park entrance. However, coverage is partial: the response does not describe several important current features, such as the café, children’s play area, and retained north-west rose garden, and the overview is vague (“many changes happened”) rather than summarising the overall pattern. Some details are unclear or inaccurate: the underground car-park access is an additional entrance, not a replacement for the southern park entrance. Develop the overview and compare the main changes more systematically.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: an introduction and overview are followed by a paragraph about 1920 and one about the present. This gives the reader a basic framework, and transitions such as “In 1920,” “In recent time,” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several features are joined in long, loosely connected sentences. The repeated use of “also” and “and” makes the description feel list-like, while “finally” introduces a sentence that is left unfinished. Grouping features by area or by what changed, and using clearer links such as “whereas” and “by contrast,” would make the comparisons easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “entrances,” “distributed,” “replaced,” “fountain,” and “amphitheatre.” These choices show an attempt to use task-specific language. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make the description less clear, including “parc,” “defferent,” “gardns,” and “happend.” Some collocations are also unnatural: “the park completely with new view” and “stage of musicians” do not express the intended meaning precisely. Aim for accurate map vocabulary and natural combinations, such as “the park’s layout was transformed” and “a stage for musicians.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise terms will improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the basic time contrast between 1920 and today is generally understandable. However, grammatical control is weak: errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “when he opened the first time” and “the garden was have” use incorrect structures, while “the fountain removed” needs a passive form such as “the fountain was removed.” The sentence beginning “Overall” also lacks a clear grammatical construction, and the final sentence stops after “water,” leaving the idea incomplete. Practise accurate past and present passive forms for describing changes, and build shorter complete sentences before attempting longer comparisons.

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