Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two image provides information regarding the great transformation of Grange park over a period of hundred years.

overall, it can be clearly notice the park has gone through significant alterations over a period of century, seats are located in new ways, Fountain replaced by a square shape Rose garden, Stage for musicians turned into Amphitheatre for concerts, entrance underground car park was made.

In 1920, the park was in rectangular shape had two entrance as: Arnold avenue and Eldon street, beautiful fountain at centre of the park, multiple seats on all the sides of park, a stage for musicians between two semi-circle rose garden, a pond for water plants at right corner of the park just before a rose garden, a glasshouse just beside the Eldon street entrance.

at present, several transformation has been done the stage for musicians has been takeover by amphitheatre for concerts with occupying more area than ealier, at centre fountain was dismantled a new square shape large rose garden was made with seats on all the sides of it, a rose garden transformed into cafe, pond for water plants replaced by children's play area, glasshouse were removed and new water feature were installed and a major entrance for underground car park was constructed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main transformation clearly: the central fountain becomes a rose garden, the musicians’ stage is replaced by an amphitheatre, and the former pond and glasshouse sites are redeveloped. You also compare the park’s earlier and present layouts, including the new underground car-park entrance. This gives the response a clear overview and covers the key changes. Some details, however, are inaccurate or over-generalised: the park did not have “two entrance[s]” in total, as the map shows entrances on both streets in each plan, and the seats were not “on all the sides” of the park in 1920. The description of the western area as a stage between two semi-circular rose gardens is also unclear. More precise location descriptions would strengthen the account.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable progression: an introduction and overview are followed by a description of the 1920 plan and then the present-day changes. This chronological organisation helps the reader compare the two maps, and phrases such as “In 1920” and “at present” signal the shift in time. However, the overview and body repeat several changes, and the long lists of features make some sentences difficult to follow. The opening overview also combines several changes in one sentence without clear links. Use separate, focused sentences and group features by area—for example, the northern and eastern changes together, then the central and western changes—to make the progression more controlled. Clearer punctuation and paragraph breaks would also help.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for describing map changes, including “replaced,” “transformed,” “dismantled,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature.” These choices show an attempt to use precise terms rather than relying only on basic words. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, however, such as “great transformation,” “takeover by,” and “a major entrance … was constructed”; the map indicates an entrance to an underground car park, not necessarily a major entrance. There are also spelling and form errors, including “ealier” and “semi-circle.” Aim for natural map-description phrases such as “was converted into,” “was replaced by,” and “is located in the south-east corner.” This would improve precision while retaining your useful range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences that compare past and present features, but control is uneven. Errors in agreement, articles, tense, and sentence construction occur in examples such as “The two image provides,” “it can be clearly notice,” and “several transformation has been done.” Some sentences are also joined as long lists, as in the description beginning “In 1920,” which makes grammatical relationships unclear. There are attempts at complex structures, but these are often faulty, so meaning sometimes requires extra effort from the reader. Practise building shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and past-tense forms. For example: “The fountain was replaced by a square rose garden, with seats on all four sides.”

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