Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

there are such a huge changes was done. In this era, Grange park is totally renovate and many changes occur such that fountain just infront of entrance eliminate and area covered by planting the rose flower and seats are placed outskirts of rose garden. Another entrance of car park build underground near the water feature. A new cafe construct in the north-south side of Arnold Avenue entrance and children's play area build at the corner where children can play. Glasshouse was replaced by water feature where plants got water. One big feature, the stage for musicians was upgared into a vast area infront of rose garden and now its called Amphitheatre for concerts where singer sings song and music. the seats are eradicate from the corner and side of 'Amphitheatre for concerts'. The rose garden is finished fron the corner of east-west of elder street for beautify the park view.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the pond by a children’s play area, the glasshouse by a water feature, and the former stage area by an amphitheatre. You also note the central rose garden and surrounding seats. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the park’s main transformation, and some details are inaccurate or unclear: the fountain was in the centre, not “infront of entrance,” and the café is on the northern edge east of the entrance, rather than on the “north-south side.” The final claim about a rose garden being removed from a corner is also confusing, since the north-west garden remains and the south-west area becomes part of the amphitheatre. Select the main changes accurately and summarise them before listing details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response moves through several features of the park, so a reader can identify some of the comparisons being made. However, the information is presented as one continuous sequence without a clear overview or paragraph structure, and the progression between locations is difficult to follow. For example, the discussion jumps from the central fountain to the car-park entrance, then to the café and play area, before returning to the western stage and rose garden. Linking phrases such as “In contrast,” “In the north-east,” and “Meanwhile” could make the comparisons clearer, but the main improvement is to group changes by area or by old and new features, with a separate opening overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to describing changes, including “replaced,” “underground,” “water feature,” and “Amphitheatre for concerts.” These choices help convey the park’s development, but inaccurate word choice and spelling sometimes make the meaning unclear. For instance, “renovate” does not naturally describe the park’s overall changes here, “eradicate” is too strong for seats being removed, and “upgared” is misspelled. Phrases such as “where plants got water” and “where singer sings song and music” are also imprecise and informal for an academic report. Aim for accurate map-description terms such as “converted into,” “located,” and “was removed,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent, and errors often make relationships between features hard to understand. Examples include “there are such a huge changes was done,” “a new cafe construct,” and “children's play area build,” where agreement and passive verb forms are faulty. Tense also shifts between past and present without a clear pattern, as in “was replaced” followed by “plants got water.” Articles, prepositions, and punctuation are also unreliable. Practise using a consistent past-versus-present comparison, especially passive forms such as “was replaced by” and “is now located,” and separate the information into complete, clearly punctuated sentences.

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