Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The image shows Grange Park when it was opened in 1920 and when it looks like today.

Overall, the park has been upgraded to meet the requirements of modern world. Fountain, glasshouse and pond have been removed while newer amnities like a cafe, amphitheatre, and childeren's play area have been added. Moreover, underground car parking has been added.

In 1920, the park had a pond which has been replaced by a children's park. There were three rose gardens, one has been removed while the second one has been moved towards the centre whereas, a cafe has taken place of of the third rose garden.The seats have been moved towards the central rose garden from the sides of the garden.

The central fountain has been replaced by a fancy water feature. Today, park has a large amphitheatre for concerts rather than a small stage. A small underground parking has been developed towards the entrance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You provide a clear overview of the park’s modernisation and identify several major changes, including the removal of the pond, glasshouse and fountain, and the addition of a café, play area and amphitheatre. This covers the main purpose of the task, and some comparisons are relevant. However, a few details are inaccurate or unclear: the central fountain was replaced by a rose garden, not the “fancy water feature”; the water feature is in the south-east, where the glasshouse stood. The rose gardens were not moved towards the centre: the north-west garden remains, while the central garden is new. The seating arrangement is also described imprecisely. More precise location-by-location comparisons would complete the overview more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs describing changes. This gives the reader a coherent general progression, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover” and “while” help connect ideas. However, the details within the body paragraphs are not always sequenced clearly. For example, the sentence about the rose gardens combines their removal, movement and the café’s location, making the relationships difficult to follow. “The central fountain…” then introduces another change without a clear link to the preceding description. Organise the comparisons by area—north, centre, west and south-east—and use clear references such as “the former pond” to make cohesion more precise and less dependent on broad connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing changes, including “replaced,” “removed,” “added” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” These choices make the general transformation understandable, and you attempt more descriptive wording such as “upgraded” and “requirements of modern world.” However, some expressions are imprecise or unnatural for a map report: “children’s park” is less exact than “children’s play area,” and “fancy water feature” is subjective and refers to the wrong location. There are also spelling errors in “amnities” and “childeren’s,” plus the repeated “of” in “of of.” Prefer neutral, precise terms and check spelling carefully; this would make the descriptions more accurate and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the contrast in “while newer amenities…have been added” and the relative clause in “a pond which has been replaced.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems are present. In “when it was opened…and when it looks like today,” the tense pattern is inconsistent; “when it looks like today” should be phrased as “as it looks today.” The sentence beginning “There were three rose gardens” shifts awkwardly into “one has been removed,” and the long clause needs clearer punctuation. “Today, park has…” also needs an article before “park.” Aim to keep tense choices consistent and divide crowded comparisons into shorter, accurately punctuated sentences.

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