Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams illustrate how the layout of a public park has changed over the years after its opening in 1920.

Overall, the park has undergone significant redevelopment. Some traditional have been improved, while other areas have been removed completely. There is a lot less plantation today than before. Biggest improvemnts have been done to the stage and the fountain whereas other features faced minimal upgrades.

In 1920, the entrances to Grange park were in the North from the arnold avenue and the South.from the eldon street. The entrances directly led to the fountain in the centre of the park. The park included a lot of plantation like rose gardens and a pond for water plants. There were seats at almost every side. It also featured a syage for musicians and a glasshouse.

Since then, there has been a lot of renovation. The entrances remain at the same place but the fountain ha been replaced with a rose garden . All the seats have been moved to the sides of the rose garden. A new cafe has been installed and a children's playground has also been built in place of the pond. The stage has been upgraded to a amphitheatres for concerts, A new entrance is also built on the right boundary of the park for an underground car parking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You give a relevant overview of substantial redevelopment and identify several key changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond site becoming a children’s play area, and the addition of a café and underground-car-park entrance. The comparison between the two plans is generally clear. However, some important details are missing or imprecise: the glasshouse site is now a water feature, the south-west rose garden was replaced as part of the western area used for the amphitheatre, and the north-west rose garden remains. The overview also says there is “a lot less plantation” and that other features had “minimal upgrades,” which are broad claims not clearly supported by the plan. More precise coverage of these changes would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, a description of the 1920 plan, and a paragraph on the present-day layout. This gives the reader a sensible chronological progression, and phrases such as “In 1920” and “Since then” help signal the comparison. Some connections between details are less clear, however. The overview’s claims about “traditional” features and “minimal upgrades” are not explained, and the final paragraph moves through several changes without consistently locating them in the park. There are also awkward sentence boundaries and punctuation, particularly around “concerts, A new entrance.” Grouping changes by area or pairing each former feature with its replacement would make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “layout,” “redevelopment,” “entrances,” “replaced,” and “underground car parking,” so the main changes are usually understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “plantation” is not the natural term for park greenery, “upgraded” does not accurately describe the stage being replaced by an amphitheatre, and “a lot of renovation” is less suitable than a more precise description of redevelopment. Spelling errors such as “improvemnts” and “syage,” along with inconsistent capitalisation of place names, also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise map vocabulary and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the intended meaning remains clear. There are, however, some errors in articles, verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction. For example, “the fountain ha been replaced” has an incorrect verb form, while “to a amphitheatres” has an article and number mismatch. The sentence “The entrances to Grange park were in the North from the arnold avenue and the South.from the eldon street” is difficult to follow because its prepositions and punctuation are not controlled. Capitalisation and spacing around sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. To improve, use straightforward location patterns such as “The northern entrance was on Arnold Avenue” and proofread each sentence for complete, correctly formed clauses.

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