Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram presents the current plan for the public park along with showing the previous one opened in 1920.

Overall, the today's plan invoved few different sectors than previos one while some things remained same in both plans except places being changed.

The public park in 1920 included two main entrance areas which called ARNOLD AVENUE and ELDON STREET. Both included same things like Seats, Rose Gardens on the same spot for both while Rose Garden again being there at the East of ARNOLD AVENUE whereas Glasshouse was presented at the opposite. Seats were also included in East corner, along with Glasshouse and Ponds for water plants was right at North. On the West side, 2 Seats area was placed in both corners. Fountain remained in the middle of both entrances with stage for musicians being on the left.

The today's park, both entrances were at same place while new other things being replaced with old. The middle had tose garden along with seats all around it. cafe and childern's play area was introduced at the east north while water feature was at east south. On the west north, rose garden was built while Amphitheatre for concerts being below.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main comparison that the park has changed while retaining its two entrances, and you mention several important features, including the central garden, café, play area and amphitheatre. However, the overview is vague: “few different sectors” does not clearly summarise the major transformations. Some details are inaccurate or unclear. The entrances are on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street, rather than being entrance areas that “included” seats and gardens; the central fountain did not remain, but was replaced by a rose garden; and the pond was in the north-east corner, not simply “right at North.” You also omit the underground car-park entrance and the south-east water feature’s replacement of the glasshouse. A clearer overview and more precise comparisons would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the 1920 and present-day layouts. This helps the reader follow the broad time comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to track because locations and features are grouped imprecisely. For example, the 1920 paragraph moves from the entrances to seats, gardens, the glasshouse, pond and fountain without a consistent route around the map. Phrases such as “Both included same things” and “Fountain remained in the middle of both entrances” also make the relationships between features unclear. Organise each description by area—north, centre, west and south/east—and use clear contrasts such as “whereas” or “in contrast” to connect the changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “entrance,” “Seats,” “Rose Gardens,” “Glasshouse” and “Amphitheatre for concerts,” so the reader can identify many of the features. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or awkward, such as “sectors” for park features and “at the east north” for a location. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “invoved,” “previos,” “tose” and “childern's,” which reduce clarity and control. Aim to use standard location phrases and precise verbs for map changes, such as “was replaced by,” “remained,” and “was relocated.” This would make the description more natural and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors are frequent, and some sentence patterns are difficult to interpret. For example, “Overall, the today's plan invoved few different sectors than previos one” has problems with articles, comparison structure and sentence construction. “The public park in 1920 included two main entrance areas which called…” is missing a verb form, while “The today's park, both entrances were at same place” is a sentence fragment. Subject–verb agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “cafe and childern's play area was introduced.” Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, agreement and past-versus-present forms.

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